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Tony Abbot
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since 2000-11-18
Posts 209
North Wales,UK

0 posted 2000-11-18 07:18 PM


She is the song of the morning thrush,
The hum of creation at the break of dawn,
She is the moon and the midnight's hush,
Hours before the day is born.

She is the sky of azure blue,
The forest and the deep sea swell,
She is the wish that never comes true,
The sound of coins landing in empty wells.

She is the raindrop on a desert rose,
The change that lands in beggars' hands,
She is the secret no one knows,
The truth hidden in every grain of sand.

She is the sound of supernal choirs,
The pearl born from the oyster's grit,
She is the good in cheats and liars,
The true amongst the counterfeit.

She is the golden haze of the sun,
The wandering star that transfixes your eye,
She is the race that can never be won,
The smile that caused a thousand sighs.

She is the letter you could not send,
The words that choked inside your heart,
She is where I begin and end,
And I will wither when we part.



'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-11-18 07:25 PM


She is the song of the morning thrush,
The hum of creation at the break of dawn,
She is the moon and the midnight's hush,
Hours before the day is born.
She is the sky of azure blue,
The forest and the deep sea swell,
She is the wish that never comes true,
The sound of coins landing in empty wells.

She is the raindrop on a desert rose,
The change that lands in beggars' hands,
She is the secret no one knows,
The truth hidden in every grain of sand.
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and she inspires amazing things in you...
this is lovely, wonderful imagery and superb rhyme
you have some really unique and cool lines in here...

"The change that lands in beggars' hands,"

very cool line
Welcome to Passions Tony, so nice to have you here...
I look forward to more of your work
take care
jm


"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
Lao Tze Tao

~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Celeste
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since 2000-11-11
Posts 597

2 posted 2000-11-18 07:29 PM


Just beautiful.  Welcome to the forum.  I think this must be the day for romance, we've all been bitten by the bug!

Will look forward to reading more from you.

To capture and live a moment is truly living

Tony Abbot
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since 2000-11-18
Posts 209
North Wales,UK
3 posted 2000-11-18 07:29 PM


Thanks Janet.This got posted twice by mistake.I hit the 'back' button after I'd posted it once,and it got posted again.Sorry about that.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

Tony Abbot
Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209
North Wales,UK
4 posted 2000-11-18 07:31 PM


Wow,the replies come pretty fast here.Thanks for replying,dreamkeeper.
Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
5 posted 2000-11-18 07:34 PM


Tony,

This was beautiful.  She is many wonderful things it sounds like.  Nice job!  

Welcome to Passions!
LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada
6 posted 2000-11-18 07:36 PM


"She is the song of the morning thrush,
The hum of creation at the break of dawn,
She is the moon and the midnight's hush,
Hours before the day is born."

Welcome!  Your thoughts and love are expressed poigianantly here.  Beautifully written.

Poeminister

"...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls-
O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
-Poe

Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
7 posted 2000-11-18 07:41 PM


Welcome Tony, and very good entry.

"She is where I begin and end,
And I will wither when we part".

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Tony Abbot
Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209
North Wales,UK
8 posted 2000-11-18 08:02 PM


Thanks to you all for your warm welcome.Glad you enjoyed my poem.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

Victoria
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since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869

9 posted 2000-11-18 08:13 PM


welcome tony and looking forward to reading more of your poetry..enjoyed this very much..

                ~Victoria


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
10 posted 2000-11-18 08:55 PM


Welcome Tony!!! I like your style! The poem, message and format, is outstanding!  I am sure looking for more!
Weave_Watcher
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since 2000-11-18
Posts 21

11 posted 2000-11-18 09:12 PM


Very good poem.  I have a She just like this.

[This message has been edited by Weave_Watcher (edited 11-18-2000).]

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
12 posted 2000-11-18 09:18 PM


Tony:  Welcome to Passions - I enjoyed your first entry....you definitely have talent bello!   Roniece  
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