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Parker
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0 posted 2000-11-18 02:57 PM


The Fire Sonnet

Oh Flame of love 'tis cruel you mock at me,
And banish me from lusts I'll never know;
But strong this blood so hot it craves of need,
May soon be embers with the faintest glow?

Oh fuel of want, where is the touch of dreams,
This hunger aches at lovely eyes so bright;
Dare to wish I'd be the fire that you scream!
Again, Again, through every lonely night.

And still I wait for one of luscious heat,
Whose lips and thighs would melt the coldest bed;
Are you afraid to taste this sinful treat?
Or is your hunger ready to be fed?

So come and light this flame of our desire,
And lay with me to feed this inner fire.

James Parker Haley (c) Nov 18, 2000



[This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 11-18-2000).]

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-11-18 03:20 PM


Oh fuel of want, where is the touch of dreams,
This hunger aches at lovely eyes so bright
Wish I to be the fire that you scream!
Again, Again, through every lonely night.

And still I wait for one of luscious heat,
Whose lips and thighs would melt the coldest bed;
Are you afraid to taste this sinful treat?
Or is your hunger ready to be fed?

So come and light this flame of desire,
lay with me and feed this inner fire.

==================
OH man....now your not playing fair at all p-man...
hows a moth supposed to resist a flame like this  
jeeeeezzzzzeeee...and make it be a sonnet on top of it all...
talk about no mercy *smile*
good thing I stocked up on singe proof mascara *winkwink* ...

BUT seriously now...
this is AWESOME...you know how I admire your sonnets parker...
you do this so very well...
the cadence and flow is like butter
and your vocabulary and verbiage is poetry in motion...
and the sensuality ... well you know we're all gonna swoon to the moon  
very very cool imagery and theme here...
so cool its hot....
excellent writing p-man..truly
makes a moth's muse have such poetic envy  
later-flame-glow-gator
me

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2000-11-18 03:41 PM


Haleyja,
Nice writing, enjoyed the read.

ethome
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3 posted 2000-11-18 04:16 PM


This is hot stuff Parker whew ...great writing ... love how the fire grows from a glow to a full fledged flame of desire ...take care... ethome
Tony Abbot
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4 posted 2000-11-18 04:20 PM


This was very well written,with a good closing couplet.Fine work.
Balladeer
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5 posted 2000-11-18 06:05 PM


AH, Parker, leave it to you to make an ash out of yourself! I hear there's a sale on asbestos sheets at Macy's..


Actually, the sonnet is great....two syllable short of perfection...but who's counting?  

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6 posted 2000-11-18 06:16 PM


can feel the ache and hunger in this one, Parker. Very nicely done  

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Lighthousebob
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7 posted 2000-11-18 06:37 PM


What a great sonnet.  I know it must have taken a lot of time and thought to write a fourteen decasyllabler that singes the hairs like this one does.  Great Job!  Bob <><
Parker
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8 posted 2000-11-18 06:45 PM


Janet, thank you brown-eye's. I never thought when I wrote it, but it has a connection to the moth to flame concept don't you think ..  

Seymour, thank you very much.  

ethome, thanks buddy.  

Tony, thank you and welcome to passions, and I must ask you about wales some time.  

Balladeer, I think your calculator is on the blink, cause since you mentioned that I've been counting and recounting... and believe me nothing is short...
fire and desire had me worried but I checked them and they are ok... so prove it cause I can't find them....  

nakdthoughts, thank you very much.  

Lighthousebob, thank you. a few hours anyway.  

Parker

tracie66
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9 posted 2000-11-18 06:56 PM


Oh James this burns...HOT
Tracie~

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dgvarner
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10 posted 2000-11-18 08:14 PM


DAMN...!  (oops..can i say that in here?..cause its all i got right now..!!)

i'll be back to feel this one again....

  gale


"so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey

Parker
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11 posted 2000-11-18 09:08 PM


Tracie, thank you.... well I do like hot.  

dg, you'd better... come back and feel it.  

........

Balladeer, I must bow to your sharp eye's and
the fact that you can count with two hands better then I.  
You are right, I finally found an old dictionary that told me fire was 1 and desire was 2. Those two lines were plaging me from the start. I kept adding an extra one syllible word to both and reading out loud its 11 damn why do these two lines want 11 syllibles. The flow had been ten but I kept counting 11. duh is me.   Thanks.


Parker



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Corinne
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12 posted 2000-11-18 10:43 PM


Me thinks those lips might be too hot to kiss, darlin'


Cor

Nice and tight, very well written, Park.

Michael
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13 posted 2000-11-19 12:17 PM


Wonderfully done, Parker, a very enjoyable read.


Michael

Marina
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14 posted 2000-11-19 12:36 PM


I love your Sonnets!!!  

You were made to write this kind of poetry I think.  You have such a flare and rare natural talent for writing this style.  

Just keeps the fire away from me...us witches have had bad experiences with flames before!     

Marina

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15 posted 2000-11-19 12:40 PM


Parker* Very very awesome writing...you
weave a sonnet with flair and passion like
no other~
Does this mean your next picture you'll be
wearing a fireman's hat???  
Pleeeeeeeeeeese!!


You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~

dgvarner
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16 posted 2000-11-19 12:54 PM


oh god...i cant stand it..you melt me..!!

when i can respond to this without the shakes, i'll say something intelligent...lol

...   me

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17 posted 2000-11-19 01:14 AM



Parker-
   WOW...warming my hands on the
   computer screen now...
   who needs candles when i've got
   a built in fireplace...lol.

   this is just...wow...amazing.
   i have to echo dg...this just
   melts my heart...
   you definitely have a way with
   words, my friend.  

   beautiful  

   hugs,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



dgvarner
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18 posted 2000-11-19 02:28 AM


so firepants..this is awesome..and i love it absoluely beyond words...!

you write sonnets like a heart-song..and i dont care if fire and desire were the wrong syllable count..the fire rises while reading this one..and the desire..well....we wont talk about that in a family forum  ...LOL

very wonderful write..(btw..i had to NOT read it again in order to say something sensible with my brain on this one!!)  

hugs, g

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19 posted 2000-11-19 02:39 AM


Very Impressive
foray into format
Difficult

Applause applause
The Reader Falls
To Timeless
All Enduring
Loves Fire
Burns Us All
Yet All Do Seek

Its Brazier
No Matter
Our Scares
Tmidity Knows
Only Passionless
Hearts

Parker
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20 posted 2000-11-19 11:59 AM


Corinne, well I doubt they could beat the fire in those eyes  

Michael, thank you very much.  

Marina, well thanks for that... but don't you carry an onboard broom extinguisher.. better get an updated model.  

Butterflies, thank you... so whats this facination women have with men and rubber trench coats anyway... cause they carry around a big hose...  

dg, that inner fire got ahold of you to eh!
come a little closer. i'm a little cold this morning and need some heart.  

Vicky, your too kind... thank you.  

dg, back again me thinks you have a big fire to put out... where's my fireman hat.  

DreamSeeker, very nice comments thank you and welcome.

Parker

Corinne
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21 posted 2000-11-19 12:57 PM


Come on baby, light my fire, come on baby light my fire, try to set the night on fire....Old song, still hot.

Corinne

dgvarner
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22 posted 2000-11-19 01:19 PM


that was 'heart' or 'heat' you sd you needed..i got both baby..  

and we dont need no stinking firemans hat..lets dont put out the fire..just let it burn......... !!

hugs,g

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23 posted 2000-11-19 01:42 PM


Wow! Excellent Parker! Such beautiful wording ... I loved the perfect flow in this piece. You've left wonderful imagery burnt into my mind, much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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24 posted 2000-11-19 03:01 PM


i love your fire sonnets ha..very sensuous.
written with ink of passion..

                ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Parker
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25 posted 2000-11-19 08:47 PM


Corinne, jeez and I thought that was an invite.... bummer..  

dg, yeah whats that old joke... more hose more hose... ok where's the fire..  

Kit, thank you, another burning comment.. things are getting just a little hot around here...  

Victoria, passion did you say passion... sure come get some ink then..  

Parker

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26 posted 2000-11-20 12:53 PM


Well, it looks like you've heated things up with this one.

It's very good and I like the form very much.

passion is life. . . ~Diana


Mark Bohannan
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27 posted 2000-11-20 01:01 PM


Parker my man...now this could melt the cold off of any heart you are seeking.  Lovely sonnet and yes, this cowboy was moved by it deeply, but we need not go into how much now do we?  You know that I love to find a sonnet in the blue pages and when it is one penned by you then I know going in that I am going to be treated to a very special moment and you have never failed in that area at all.  You shine my friend in a thousand ways.
Parker
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28 posted 2000-11-20 04:25 PM


PV.... thanks for replying.

Mark, never enough heat in this place don't you think...  

Parker

Tiersdin
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29 posted 2000-11-20 04:28 PM


Wow!  

"damn us both
to fiery hell's
heaven in your arms"

very niiiice...

-Tier

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30 posted 2000-11-20 04:32 PM


It is a perfect sonnet  
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31 posted 2000-11-20 04:38 PM


Simply an echo, but just wanted to say "Well done."

Rainydays

dgvarner
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32 posted 2000-11-21 11:04 AM


btw...this makes an AWESOME bedtime story.........  

g

"so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey

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read to me by fire's flames
from memory of days gone old
when passion's fire was desire
and of the day when you were bold

Bravo....


Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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~Parker~

Hello handsome!
This is wonderful
I could feel the heat.......
whew!

~SEA

Parker
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35 posted 2000-11-21 04:15 PM


Tiersdin, thank you.  

Balladeer, thanks for the backup counting.  

Rainydays, well then thank you for the echo.  

dg, now we ain't talking about sleeping here are we..  

Sunshine, thank you very much for that.  

SEA, well thank you sexy.  

Parker

Dee
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36 posted 2003-08-08 06:56 AM


Wow Park, what you can do with words is beyond belief. Into my library it goes.

D

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are.        Clearwater

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37 posted 2005-08-21 03:11 AM


An absolutely perfectly done sonnet!  Beautiful!
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