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The Fire Sonnet

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Parker
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... the old black rum


0 posted 11-18-2000 02:57 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

The Fire Sonnet

Oh Flame of love 'tis cruel you mock at me,
And banish me from lusts I'll never know;
But strong this blood so hot it craves of need,
May soon be embers with the faintest glow?

Oh fuel of want, where is the touch of dreams,
This hunger aches at lovely eyes so bright;
Dare to wish I'd be the fire that you scream!
Again, Again, through every lonely night.

And still I wait for one of luscious heat,
Whose lips and thighs would melt the coldest bed;
Are you afraid to taste this sinful treat?
Or is your hunger ready to be fed?

So come and light this flame of our desire,
And lay with me to feed this inner fire.

James Parker Haley (c) Nov 18, 2000



[This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 11-18-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 James Parker Haley - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 11-18-2000 03:20 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Oh fuel of want, where is the touch of dreams,
This hunger aches at lovely eyes so bright
Wish I to be the fire that you scream!
Again, Again, through every lonely night.

And still I wait for one of luscious heat,
Whose lips and thighs would melt the coldest bed;
Are you afraid to taste this sinful treat?
Or is your hunger ready to be fed?

So come and light this flame of desire,
lay with me and feed this inner fire.

==================
OH man....now your not playing fair at all p-man...
hows a moth supposed to resist a flame like this  
jeeeeezzzzzeeee...and make it be a sonnet on top of it all...
talk about no mercy *smile*
good thing I stocked up on singe proof mascara *winkwink* ...

BUT seriously now...
this is AWESOME...you know how I admire your sonnets parker...
you do this so very well...
the cadence and flow is like butter
and your vocabulary and verbiage is poetry in motion...
and the sensuality ... well you know we're all gonna swoon to the moon  
very very cool imagery and theme here...
so cool its hot....
excellent writing p-man..truly
makes a moth's muse have such poetic envy  
later-flame-glow-gator
me
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 11-18-2000 03:41 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Haleyja,
Nice writing, enjoyed the read.
ethome
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3 posted 11-18-2000 04:16 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

This is hot stuff Parker whew ...great writing ... love how the fire grows from a glow to a full fledged flame of desire ...take care... ethome
Tony Abbot
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4 posted 11-18-2000 04:20 PM       View Profile for Tony Abbot   Email Tony Abbot   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tony Abbot

This was very well written,with a good closing couplet.Fine work.
Balladeer
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5 posted 11-18-2000 06:05 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

AH, Parker, leave it to you to make an ash out of yourself! I hear there's a sale on asbestos sheets at Macy's..


Actually, the sonnet is great....two syllable short of perfection...but who's counting?  
nakdthoughts
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can feel the ache and hunger in this one, Parker. Very nicely done  

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II


Lighthousebob
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7 posted 11-18-2000 06:37 PM       View Profile for Lighthousebob   Email Lighthousebob   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Lighthousebob's Home Page   View IP for Lighthousebob

What a great sonnet.  I know it must have taken a lot of time and thought to write a fourteen decasyllabler that singes the hairs like this one does.  Great Job!  Bob <><
Parker
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Janet, thank you brown-eye's. I never thought when I wrote it, but it has a connection to the moth to flame concept don't you think ..  

Seymour, thank you very much.  

ethome, thanks buddy.  

Tony, thank you and welcome to passions, and I must ask you about wales some time.  

Balladeer, I think your calculator is on the blink, cause since you mentioned that I've been counting and recounting... and believe me nothing is short...
fire and desire had me worried but I checked them and they are ok... so prove it cause I can't find them....  

nakdthoughts, thank you very much.  

Lighthousebob, thank you. a few hours anyway.  

Parker
tracie66
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9 posted 11-18-2000 06:56 PM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Oh James this burns...HOT
Tracie~



Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe




[This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 11-18-2000).]
dgvarner
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10 posted 11-18-2000 08:14 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

DAMN...!  (oops..can i say that in here?..cause its all i got right now..!!)

i'll be back to feel this one again....

  gale


"so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey
Parker
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Tracie, thank you.... well I do like hot.  

dg, you'd better... come back and feel it.  

........

Balladeer, I must bow to your sharp eye's and
the fact that you can count with two hands better then I.  
You are right, I finally found an old dictionary that told me fire was 1 and desire was 2. Those two lines were plaging me from the start. I kept adding an extra one syllible word to both and reading out loud its 11 damn why do these two lines want 11 syllibles. The flow had been ten but I kept counting 11. duh is me.   Thanks.


Parker



[This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 11-18-2000).]
Corinne
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Me thinks those lips might be too hot to kiss, darlin'


Cor

Nice and tight, very well written, Park.
Michael
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13 posted 11-19-2000 12:17 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wonderfully done, Parker, a very enjoyable read.


Michael
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14 posted 11-19-2000 12:36 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

I love your Sonnets!!!  

You were made to write this kind of poetry I think.  You have such a flare and rare natural talent for writing this style.  

Just keeps the fire away from me...us witches have had bad experiences with flames before!     

Marina
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Parker* Very very awesome writing...you
weave a sonnet with flair and passion like
no other~
Does this mean your next picture you'll be
wearing a fireman's hat???  
Pleeeeeeeeeeese!!


You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~
dgvarner
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16 posted 11-19-2000 12:54 AM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

oh god...i cant stand it..you melt me..!!

when i can respond to this without the shakes, i'll say something intelligent...lol

...   me
vlraynes
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Parker-
   WOW...warming my hands on the
   computer screen now...
   who needs candles when i've got
   a built in fireplace...lol.

   this is just...wow...amazing.
   i have to echo dg...this just
   melts my heart...
   you definitely have a way with
   words, my friend.  

   beautiful  

   hugs,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes


dgvarner
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18 posted 11-19-2000 02:28 AM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

so firepants..this is awesome..and i love it absoluely beyond words...!

you write sonnets like a heart-song..and i dont care if fire and desire were the wrong syllable count..the fire rises while reading this one..and the desire..well....we wont talk about that in a family forum  ...LOL

very wonderful write..(btw..i had to NOT read it again in order to say something sensible with my brain on this one!!)  

hugs, g
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Very Impressive
foray into format
Difficult

Applause applause
The Reader Falls
To Timeless
All Enduring
Loves Fire
Burns Us All
Yet All Do Seek

Its Brazier
No Matter
Our Scares
Tmidity Knows
Only Passionless
Hearts
Parker
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Corinne, well I doubt they could beat the fire in those eyes  

Michael, thank you very much.  

Marina, well thanks for that... but don't you carry an onboard broom extinguisher.. better get an updated model.  

Butterflies, thank you... so whats this facination women have with men and rubber trench coats anyway... cause they carry around a big hose...  

dg, that inner fire got ahold of you to eh!
come a little closer. i'm a little cold this morning and need some heart.  

Vicky, your too kind... thank you.  

dg, back again me thinks you have a big fire to put out... where's my fireman hat.  

DreamSeeker, very nice comments thank you and welcome.

Parker
Corinne
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Come on baby, light my fire, come on baby light my fire, try to set the night on fire....Old song, still hot.

Corinne
dgvarner
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22 posted 11-19-2000 01:19 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

that was 'heart' or 'heat' you sd you needed..i got both baby..  

and we dont need no stinking firemans hat..lets dont put out the fire..just let it burn......... !!

hugs,g
Kit McCallum
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Wow! Excellent Parker! Such beautiful wording ... I loved the perfect flow in this piece. You've left wonderful imagery burnt into my mind, much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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24 posted 11-19-2000 03:01 PM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Victoria

i love your fire sonnets ha..very sensuous.
written with ink of passion..

                ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

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