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VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2000-11-18 01:37 PM



Just in Time for Christmas
Virginia Salter

here I stand
cold concrete slab beneath me
covered in darkness
peering out
through azure orbs
at this scene before me

a warm hearth
pine-needle swagged mantle
sliced intermittently
with vertical blinds

in one corner
tannenbaum rises
twinkling with stars of evening sky

in another
ivory tresses
atop life’s furrows,
lines of merriment
as parentheses around azure orbs,
creases of past joy, laughter,
accentuate rose petals
beneath a droplet that glistens

knit-donned shoulders warmed
doubly from flaming coals
and woolen shawl
above gnarled fingers
resting upon quilted memories

in their grasp
tattered memento
‘Ralph and Gloria, 1932
first Christmas’

what God hath joined
no man may render asunder
imprinted recall
is ALL!
for all eternity

jubilee
for thee
forevermore

you,
oh, precious one,
have healed
my lonely heart
just in time for Christmas


© November 18, 2000

© Copyright 2000 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2000-11-18 01:49 PM


Very nice reflections indeed...soft open warm poem!!
Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
2 posted 2000-11-18 04:32 PM


VAS--

beautiful images! excellent poem. truly
liked this. take care.
~amy~

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
3 posted 2000-11-18 04:36 PM


Thank you both!!
I had so much more in mind when I began this piece.  I wanted a vivid, family scene seen through vertical blinds while standing outside on a cold, concrete sidewalk, engulfed in the blackness of night.

I had envisioned children and Mom and Dad decorating the tree, carrying on joyfully while grandma sat in the corner in her memories.  Alas, this was very long just focusing on grandma and where/when she was.

Glad you enjoyed.

CocoBaci
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

4 posted 2000-12-08 01:39 AM



VAS, this is a splendid write you share here...

The imagery you have weaved into the poem gave one a good sense of visual...

My compliments to you...

coco

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