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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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The heat of the sun rises with passion as morning dew kisses the earth you should have seen this morning but your heart bled, upon loves hearth ballet of clouds dance happily by you should have seen this morning,bright orchestra of birds, sang out their love their wings in the wind, of dawns light you were crying alone on your pillow Did you hear this morning chime? open your eyes, and see the bluebirds singing a chorus of dawns rhyme you should have seen this morning but robins eyes, a birdbath of tears please stop with loves mourning dry your eyes and listen with your ears A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very very pretty Victoria...I hope the recipient will pay attention and listen. Thanks for sharing it's warm and pleasant. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
victoria~ simply beautiful. really liked the word choice in this and how it all just flowed together. really great poem! take care. ~amy~ |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
you were crying alone on your pillow Did you hear this morning chime? open your eyes, and see the bluebirds singing a chorus of dawns rhyme you should have seen this morning but robins eyes, a birdbath of tears please stop with loves mourning dry your eyes and listen with your ears Beautiful work, Victoria. The imagery was fantastic! Joy Gather ye rosebuds while ye may, Old time is still a-flying, And this same flower that smiles today To-morrow will be dying. -Robert Herrick |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
ethome..thank you so much...nice to hear from you ethome..  amy..hi..thank you for taking time to read..appreciate your comments.. joy..thank you..for peeking in today.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Even during our times of sorrow, nature just keeps on rejoicing and it is our choice if we will join her or not... A very nice reminder. Bob <>< |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you mr. Bob..yes it is our choice indeed..appreciate you comments tonight. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
My eyes only want to cry since my lover said goodbye and now I will mourn with every breath as love sweet love is put to death. James |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
The light of dawn shines for all, we have but to open our eyes to see! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Loneheart Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 92Eastern US |
And shall not even the stars above kneel before thee for truly thou art a worthy poet indeed I have enjoyed this and all of your work very much thank you for sharing Loneheart |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
james..a sad thought isnt it..thanks for visiting james.. Eddie..yes and realize we are blessed with each new day..thank you eddie.. loneheart..thank you very much for your kind compliments..glad you enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The heat of the sun rises with passion as morning dew kisses the earth you should have seen this morning but your heart bled, upon loves hearth ballet of clouds dance happily by you should have seen this morning,bright orchestra of birds, sang out their love their wings in the wind, of dawns light ===================== this is so lovely Victoria ...as always you write with such beautiful imagery..and that first verse catches the reader... "but your heart bled, upon loves hearth" wow..what an emotional line ..such impact very well done take care jm |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
This peice could cheer anyone, I would think... lovely writing, -Tier |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Victoria, that last line really wrapped it up beautifully "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Janet..thank you Janet..so nice to hear from you today..and im glad you enjoyed.. tier..thank you so much...and thank you for peeking in.. kathleen..thank you hon..always nice to hear from you sweet lady..:0 ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoyed!!!!!!! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you again vandana..for your nice response... ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Just doing some reading before bed. Glad I came across this. Very nicely done. I will be listening when I awake in the morning -------------- You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face and show the world all the love in your heart Then people are gonna treat you better You're gonna find, yes you will That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
very good indeed. I spent my time crying in the pillow. Now thank God that is behind. Love and light, Richard |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you kitkat ..its a little cold here to be listening to the birds outside..not sure where you are ...maybe you can open the door real fast ha..im in north texas and suppose to snow some...  Richard..i am glad it is behind you ...and i hope it stays that way... thank you for your kind comments today.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you should have seen this morning but robins eyes, a birdbath of tears please stop with loves mourning dry your eyes and listen with your ears oh my ~V~ I want a morning of no mourning...hope it comes soon..beautiful writing ...huggzz ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Victoria, A well said message in this writing that I see. And yes, it is a shame that at times we do not listen with our ears. BC |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you wynter and bill for your nice comments...nice to hear from you both ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Victoria this was wonderful. You know I love most about the dawns new light is that with it comes a new day.....and life is born anew with each day. Thanks for such a beautiful poem. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. Donna Smith |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you Donna..and i hope your new year is filled with happiness..HUGS ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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