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Diminished Friendship |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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We met each other today It was to be a joyous occasion You avoided my eyes, preferring to stare at the cigarette in your hand instead Perhaps i shouldnt have been so happy after all |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
kaile- OUCH!! it hurts when friendships fade or become one-sided...it's such a shame, but it does happen. you've expressed it well, and in very few words...great job  hugs to you, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Kaile~ it hurts down to the very core when a friend lets you down.......believe me, I'm there now dealing with those feelings....I realy understood this and relate. I hope your heart is ok......hugs -SEA |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kaile- powerful write even though short in words. *hugs* to you...hope you are doing okay..i know how hard it is to realize a friendship isn't what it once was. take care. ~amy~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
It hurts to know that it's not what you thought it was. . . excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well who is to know...how these things will work out.....no eye contact...no good... |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
The eyes will always give it away, won't they. You give just enough detail to give depth while still holding to a minimalist style. Excellent! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kaile~ The joy is in giving ... It doesn't always shine in another's eyes. But happy can't be taken away, as it is a gift we give ourselves. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you guys for all the support...it pains when our shared experiences become irrelevant to him but i guess life goes on.... Yes, marge thank you for the advice there....it is up to us to decide whether we would be happy or not  HUGS all |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Diminished Friendship Sequel: Email Poison My dispirited eyes lit up A fresh sugary surge of energy welled up my body Why, you never bothered to reply my mails A mail from you is sweet treasure indeed Hell, my hand even shook when i opened your message Oh, what a delightful surprise in wait for me! It shook even harder when the downcast eyes read: I have a favour to ask You will help, wont you A puppet, i am, waiting for its master to dangle the strings so that it may dance a bit [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 12-01-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A puppet, i am, waiting for its master to dangle the strings so that it may dance a bit =============== wow..what a verse.... Kaile this is powerful emotional work both poems have such impact excellent expression... i relate to this much... hope it works out better for you ... take care jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kaile, Powerful poetry indeed, Great expectations dashed, new hope in the mail (along with the check), dashed again, an emotional rollercoaster, foder for touching poetry.You write from the heart well my friend. Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
You know I love your short, powerful way of writing, and this is no exception. All the feel is there, and so well written. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
The only thing that would hurt more is when someone is glancing at their wristwatch and you know....you just know. Enjoyed this, short and to the point and said so much. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Kaile, seems as if somehow your friendship with this person has some gap in between. Could it be you haven't met in a long time, and now both of you have changed? _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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