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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-11-18 10:20 AM




One foot on the brink of emptiness
We stand poised, holding onto our fears
Gazing around in sad confusion
Always living on the edge of tears

A slight turn of the head here and there
Shows us nothing on horizon’s view
Resisting life’s fulfillment and joy
Holding tight to the past’s residue

The world may still move on around us
But we stand here with our guarded heart
Hoping for some small semblance of
The contented past that fell apart

Step forward and we may find nothing
Move forward and the unknown appears
So here we are, our hearts rejected
Ever living on the edge of tears.


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ethome
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1 posted 2000-11-18 10:25 AM


After a serious hurt that often happens ...you end up with a gaurded heart and trust gets a boot out the door and suspiciousness comes right on in...the poem here is excellent it's so full of truth but done so well that the reader isn't going to forget the content and the purpose.   really enjoyed it for sure......ethome.....
Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-11-18 10:30 AM


Wonderful expression Sharon ... you've captured deep feelings so well in this poem. Indeed we become guarded and hesitant clinging to the past, fearful of what may or may not be in the future, beautifully written.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

peppermint35
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3 posted 2000-11-18 10:32 AM


It's a neighborhood I know well...thought-provoking write....I enjoyed it

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

jwesley
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4 posted 2000-11-18 10:32 AM


I really like this, my friend. And love you title, too.

jwesley

Aimster
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5 posted 2000-11-18 12:43 PM


PD-

emotionally powerful poem you have
penned here. the fear of the unknown
can be VERY scary, but sometimes you
just gotta take a risk. enjoyed this
very much! take care.
~amy~  

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2000-11-18 01:14 PM


The world may still move on around us
But we stand here with our guarded heart
Hoping for some small semblance of
The contented past that fell apart

Step forward and we may find nothing
Move forward and the unknown appears
So here we are, our hearts rejected
Ever living on the edge of tears.

================
Sharon this is a very emotional piece...
its appeal and beauty is in its melancoly,
and its haunted heart emote.
perfect rhyme and cadence ...
and the repetition of the title line adds to its poetic grace.(very cool title btw)
very well written ...and related too wel.
jm

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7 posted 2000-11-18 01:45 PM


That's when we just have to take that last step over the edge. . .



-------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2000-11-18 03:56 PM


Poet deVine,
You have a little gem here, I'd put it away in the vault.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
9 posted 2000-11-18 04:07 PM


all I can say is, I'm glad I chose this one to  read and like Seymour I shall store it in  my mind and library, no one could have  written this better...my feelings of yesterday, today and....hopefully not of  the morrow huggzz, Sharon

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Nan
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10 posted 2000-11-18 04:13 PM


The past is just that - past - and we rarely can return to it - as you say - Life goes on...

For each door closed to us, however, another opens... That's what I hear, anyway..

Nice work here, PdV..

Gentle Spirit
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11 posted 2000-11-18 05:02 PM


The edge is a place that holds so many possibilities PD.  Sometimes it is so hard to keep a balance from teetering over the edge.  Beautiful, and so well done.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free.



serenity blaze
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12 posted 2000-11-18 05:03 PM


This is fantastic!!! I love this one...it's a keeper for me...you are burning the keys these days.
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13 posted 2000-11-18 05:54 PM


"Step forward and we may find nothing
Move forward and the unknown appears
So here we are, our hearts rejected
Ever living on the edge of tears."

Sharon, I can really relate to this piece. You describe the feelings so well, and so beautifully. Another gem from you, my friend. This one goes in my library!

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



Lighthousebob
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14 posted 2000-11-18 06:16 PM


Living on the edge of tears...

Wow, what a predicament to be in.  Hey, we can't go back in life... there is only going forward, but we can go forward standing still or we can go forward falling.  What about falling forward?  Thats it!  If you gotta fall... Fall Forward.  Just an idea.  Luv, Bob <><

Daniel J D
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15 posted 2000-11-18 06:35 PM


Poetdevine,
I know that feeling very well, you have magnificent skills, well done.

"Hoping for some small semblance of
The contented past that fell apart"

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

WhtDove
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16 posted 2000-11-18 08:16 PM


Ya know, this brought tears! Damn Sharon, this grabs the heart!!

Hugz

<*\\\><

I know not what the future holds,
but I know Who holds the future.

I don't question YOUR existance - GOD


Lone Wolf
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17 posted 2000-11-18 08:19 PM


So true, PdV.  Well expressed thoughts.  



Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

passing shadows
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18 posted 2000-11-18 08:52 PM


well done! I have been there, and am visiting once again, to that edge. I guess it's kinda like standing in the check-out line and seeing something that hits just right, enough to push you over the edge...and you bust out crying...you felt it welling up, but prayed that you could wait till you get into the car, tried to think of something else to stall it...yes, I'm there.
Poet deVine
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19 posted 2000-11-18 09:23 PM


Thank you all for you kind words. The title has lived in my heart for 10 years. Last night, the poem wrote itself around the title. Thank YOU all for inspiring me for the last 18 months. I will never forget all that you've given me.  
Jamie
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20 posted 2000-11-18 10:07 PM


Wonderful poem PDV--a place we all visit from time to time


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...
21 posted 2000-11-19 03:17 AM


So many accolades, and each one richly desrved. Fabulous!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.


Lloyd
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22 posted 2000-11-19 04:22 AM


I just have to add my voice to the crowd - a great piece !
Loneheart
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23 posted 2000-11-19 07:09 AM


I am left  speechless after this read
your work is just as beautiful as always my friend


Loneheart

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
24 posted 2000-11-19 07:40 AM


What a great line! Wish I had thought of it! Wow...

Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Denise
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25 posted 2000-11-19 10:25 PM


You've expressed it well, Sharon. Well done!

Denise

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26 posted 2000-11-21 12:42 PM


What WhtDove said! *S* (nodding vigorously) This is a beautiful description of yearning and uncertainty (two emotions I know well! LOL)
A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale
27 posted 2000-11-21 02:19 PM


Oh my...This was incredibly, beautifully written!

Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul.

OLIAS
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28 posted 2000-11-21 02:32 PM


A powerful poem P.D. I think its the thrill of the risk of it not working out that makes it so worthwhile when it does, the joys return 10 fold. I enjoyed reading this.
Thank you.

Regards,
Olias.

Irish Rose
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29 posted 2000-11-21 02:34 PM


This is a moving piece about what I can most relate to.  Wanting to move, but afraid. It is so expressive.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen



Wilfred Yeats
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30 posted 2000-11-21 04:06 PM


counting this response - you've quickly accumulated 29 - testimony to the fact that you've penned a real gem - it goes in my treasure box!
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