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BirdeeB
Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106
USA

0 posted 2000-11-18 05:37 AM


Fire In your eyes
coldness in your voice
over taken by a hatred
the smell of the outside world
s ickens you
you get pleasure out of torment
grasping on to the life that passes
you by with a smile

(Laugh out loud with the
guilty pleasure)

so worried about the
constent scrunity
of the day before.
Analyze each and
every word that
was said.
With a Tear stained heart
you push over the edge
Knowing that civilization
won't hold you back
you get up and battle.
Tamper with the disillusion
of those who have
"loved you"

(Laugh out with the
guilty pleasure)

Feel those eyes at the
back of your head
You know whats
catching up with
you,
can smell it with each
passing step
Left those feelings behind
To cease
to not exsist any more.
Would all the pleasure
He could take
He (laughs out loud at the guilty pleasures)

© Copyright 2000 Brandi Butler - All Rights Reserved
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2000-11-18 06:00 AM


Welcome to Passions!! This is very well done, you really got me caught up in the type of person and I know what you mean. I love that line "laugh out loud at guilty pleasures." That line sure says a lot...it's a long old road that doesn't have a turn in it....ethome
Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
2 posted 2000-11-18 04:45 PM


Birdee--

great write! very intense and powerful,
spooked me a little (but that is good).
made me also think a lot about life.
take care.
~amy~
p.s. if you're new (i haven't seen your
work before)...welcome to Passions!  

Daniel J D
Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
3 posted 2000-11-18 06:38 PM


BirdeeB,
Well done, hope you keep on writing, there is so much talent here.

"Left those feelings behind
To cease
to not exsist any more".

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

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