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Victoria
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0 posted 2000-11-18 02:38 AM


Her gown of sheer gossamer dances in the breeze
     as she smiles within the portrait of the day

     Windswept is her hair..her beauty cannot compare
     strolling within blue bonnet meadows

     A rainbow of dreams lost within the rain
     pastel wishes knocking at her window pane

     Her hair,  pure white, in pale candlelight
     still in love with the ambiance of a dream

     Forgot his name long ago, someone she use to know
     within blue bonnet meadows, pigtails and pink bows




A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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peppermint35
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1 posted 2000-11-18 02:47 AM


I love the weave of this, Victoria   

Blue bonnets are special, aren't they!!!

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

Celeste
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2 posted 2000-11-18 08:01 AM


The description of this is outstanding.  Left me smiling.  Well done!

To capture and live a moment is truly living

ethome
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3 posted 2000-11-18 08:10 AM


I like that..."within the portrait of the day."  nice work all the way through.."within blue bonnet meadows,"  yep! great work!!
Victoria
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4 posted 2000-11-18 10:52 AM


pepper..thank you for peeking in..yes they are..glad you liked pepper..

dreamkeeper..thank you so much and im appy you enjoyed..

ethome..thank you ethome..nice to hear from you

                   ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-11-18 10:55 AM


"still in love with the ambiance of a dream"

Lovely, delicate images you've penned here Victoria ... beautiful sentiments, much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Tony Abbot
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6 posted 2000-11-18 11:21 AM


A beautiful piece,Victoria,mellifluous and enchanting.
Victoria
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7 posted 2000-11-18 01:54 PM


thank you so much Kit and Tony..nice to hear from you both..appreciate your kind comments

               ~Victoria~



A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2000-11-18 04:02 PM




A rainbow of dreams lost within the rain
pastel wishes knocking at her window pane

    
so beautiful, this portrait of words...made me smile ~V~

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Victoria
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9 posted 2000-11-18 08:15 PM


thank you NT..glad you enjoyed..thanks for peeking today..

                 ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


CocoBaci
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10 posted 2000-12-07 10:26 PM


A rainbow of dreams lost within the rain
Pastel wishes knocking at her window pane

Her hair, pure white, in pale candlelight
Still in love with the ambiance of a dream
=============================================

VICTORIA, this is beautiful I so much like the above quoted verses you write....

Tender and touching thank you for the splendid read...

coco


    




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Victoria
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11 posted 2000-12-08 12:08 PM


thank you Coco..i thought this was gone with the wind ha...glad you enjoyed..HUGS

           ~Victoria~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Sunnyone
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12 posted 2000-12-08 12:18 PM


Oh, you do paint such beautiful pictures, and everytime I read your work, I feel the magic that you enclose in your words. Don't ever stop writing, my friend.....you are an inspiration!  


Write on!
-<--<--{(@


Victoria
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13 posted 2000-12-08 10:46 AM


thank you Sunny..what a wonderful reply from you my friend...poets like you inspire me to keep trying and keep writing.. HUGS

               ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Bill Charles
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14 posted 2000-12-08 12:20 PM


Victoria, another beauty you have written. As I read the words of this, I could feel your pen.

BC

Victoria
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15 posted 2000-12-08 02:19 PM


thank you so much Bill..glad to see you back and looking forward to reading your poems again..

                  ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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