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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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missouri

0 posted 2000-11-18 02:17 AM


Knight of the realm
Dark rider of storms
You touch me with your passion
With that look in those dark eyes

Dark knight of my dreams
You haunt my every hour
Your words like raindrops
On the lake that is my mind

Poet knight of fantasies past
Your sword the pen you wield so well
Igniting my imagination
Searing my soul with your visions

Knight of the realm
Dark rider of storms
Poet knight writer of dreams
You are all these things to me

So slay the dragons of pain in your past
Send your demons crashing to the sea
Lift me up before you on the wings of love
And come lose yourself in me



© Copyright 2000 Paula Finn - All Rights Reserved
peppermint35
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106
Texas, USA
1 posted 2000-11-18 02:20 AM


"So slay the dragons of pain in your past
Send your demons crashing to the sea
Lift me up before you on the wings of love
And come lose yourself in me"

Oh Paula!!!  This is so great; I'm simply .... breathless!!!



Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
2 posted 2000-11-18 02:42 AM


Paula,
That was just fabulous, one definitely for my library. Keep writing, please.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2000-11-18 05:03 AM


Paula really liked the last four lines immensely...James
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2000-11-18 06:18 AM


Wow is that ever good!!! I love the setting and the style ..My God !! that last verse is as poetic and beautiful as any I've read in a long time!!
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
5 posted 2000-11-18 07:54 AM


Paula,
Breathtaking is too mild a word for this beauty.
Write on
Kethry


Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed?
Rex E. Alford

Moon Dust
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Skelmersdale, UK
6 posted 2000-11-18 08:06 AM


love the style and esspecailly the last verse.

Life has got to chnage,
Nothing stays the same,
Soon it will be time,
For me to move on.


EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
7 posted 2000-11-19 04:25 AM


This is fantastic paula! Could well be your best, but I am partial to a good Knight's tale.   Certainly one for the library, I do love this one!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.


Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
8 posted 2000-11-20 01:01 AM


Pepper...thank you...breathless...what a compliment...

Daniel...that you find it worthy of your library is such a great honour...thank you

James...glad you like it sweet friend...thank you

ethome...after reading your 2000th this is high praise indeed...You are always so generous and thoughtful and I thank you so much.

Kethry...thank you sweet lady...you always have a kind reply...

Maria...thank you...yes it seems I did something right with the last verse.

Eagle...yes I know how you love knights...and I am glad you like this one...and for it to go in your library...well thats a privelege for me...



Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

9 posted 2000-11-20 01:08 AM


hey girlie..this is great...
a very different style for you..I dont recall seeing any fantasy weaves from you...but you did a superb job with this...
very cool poetry...
you should do this again
jm

There are moments ...
when I Love you ...
beyond the limits of my human heart ...

Collin Raye



jlocke
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since 2000-09-10
Posts 169
CC,TX
10 posted 2000-11-20 06:03 AM


Your sword the pen you wield so well
Igniting my imagination
Searing my soul with your visions



Love is the law, love under will.

Marsha
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Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
11 posted 2000-11-20 06:12 AM


Paula, this is utterly divine. This is one of your best, I really love this one. It's a really wonderful write from you love. Excellant work.
Take care
               Mushy Marsha
                    


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

12 posted 2000-11-20 02:21 PM


THIS is my kind of poetry!

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen



Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
13 posted 2000-11-22 12:08 PM


JM...they are all fantasies in one way or the other...but I know what you mean...not sure about writing another...I will try thanks

Jeremy...uh huh...you liked that huh? Good

Marsha...gosh girl you always make me feel so good ...thank you

Irish Rose...glad you like it...thank you


spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
14 posted 2000-11-22 01:00 AM


Very well expressed Paula,
Thanks
Rich

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
15 posted 2000-11-22 05:00 PM


Oh my, I love this, written so well, and such a true request. I hope your knight comes through.
Sandra

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
16 posted 2000-11-22 11:12 PM


'Dark knight of my dreams
You haunt my every hour
Your words like raindrops
On the lake that is my mind

Poet knight of fantasies past
Your sword the pen you wield so well
Igniting my imagination
Searing my soul with your visions'

So beautiful and romantic, Paula!  Love it!!

sp  


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

insect
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since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014

17 posted 2000-11-22 11:48 PM


WOW!
You did a great job with this one!
Very nice read Paula.
Love it.

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
18 posted 2000-11-26 01:23 AM


Rich...thanks friend...I always appreciate your comments

Sandra...glad you liked it...thanks

sp...thanks so much

Insect...glad you liked it friend...

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