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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-11-18 12:26 PM




Ellipsing Memories

ellipsing word here
and there
from nowhere
come ellipsing thoughts
turned memory
lingering

veiled thoughts
once bought
through time
high maintenance
come soft
once wrought
over time
lingering...

what I wanted
was not me
took foothold
on reality
but always the
thoughts were
lingering

and some days
only
ellipsing

saw this
done that
been there…
come here
ellipse with me

make memories
and dreams
then dream reality
with me
and ellipse me
along
a song, on keyboard
just a click away
but fingers sing
when ellipsing
toward spring…

and like
the sun
I shall
then
ellipse into
tomorrow
yesterday…



Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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Daniel J D
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1 posted 2000-11-18 01:25 AM


Sunshine,
Just wonderful. I loved it very much.

"saw this
done that
been there…
come here
ellipse with me"


Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

wayoutwalt
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2 posted 2000-11-18 01:28 AM


karilea i like the idea here yuh and the execution was just ellipsing yuh thats a good thing
Sunshine
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3 posted 2000-11-18 08:44 AM


Daniel, this is the best compliment, to have a piece revisited...thank you...

WOW...right back at ya!  thank you!


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Sven
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4 posted 2000-11-18 10:37 PM


Ellipsing as asked. . .  

Wonderful. . .

-----------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Lighthousebob
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5 posted 2000-11-18 10:54 PM


Again, you've taken the simplest words and thoughts and made them sing... "Ellipsing!"
Now, Sunshine, don't be getting ahead of yourself and becoming tomorrow prematurely.

Bob <><  

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6 posted 2000-11-19 12:52 PM


Sunshine...
I enjoyed this read  

Sunshine
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7 posted 2000-11-19 07:15 AM


Thank you Sven...{~,^}

OK, Bob, I won't, promise...{~,^}

thank you Coco...{~,^}


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Aimster
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8 posted 2000-11-19 11:46 AM


karilea-

gracious...this was beautiful. the
beauty of this seems to have taken
my words. loved this i did especially
the following lines...

"and like
the sun
I shall
then
ellipse into
tomorrow
yesterday"

*sigh* excellent write! take care.
~amy~


Sunshine
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9 posted 2000-11-20 07:16 AM


Amy, your sigh is exquisite...thank you...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Marsha
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10 posted 2000-11-20 07:37 AM


Kari, this is stunning, amazingly well written, although you never produce anything less than outstanding. You really are getting to be a master craftwoman. Wonderful.
Take care
                MM
                    
(It's one of my rush days   )


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

ethome
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11 posted 2000-11-20 07:46 AM


Sunshine..you have everything beautifully interconnected in this poems' wonderful memories...I love all the styles you use.. very good read!!....ethome
Celeste
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12 posted 2000-11-20 08:30 AM


I truly LOVE the individuality in your style......flows beautifully and your personality and thoughts just dance!

To capture and live a moment is truly living

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13 posted 2000-11-22 12:19 PM


Marsha, you are so kind with your praise, thank you...

ethome, interconnection...good word...thank you...

dreamkeeper, there are many individuals within these walls...styles abound...thank you...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




catalinamoon
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14 posted 2000-11-22 06:41 PM


Such flowing, beautiful thoughts. I missed reading too much while I was away.
Sandra

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15 posted 2000-11-22 10:12 PM


Catalinamoon, never go rambling...we need you here to inspire and transfix us...thank you for reading...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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