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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-11-18 12:20 PM


Quietly Heard

the coming home part of my day
is strictly personal
the moment I bare
the raiment of
my outer soul
and divest the coverings
of strict
to don the
comfort of soft
and gather yielding
material to
warm the skin
and in so doing
a mental seeking to
comfort the inner me
as well

then after only enough
nutrient to feed the
body
I take favored pen
and stroke the feel
~balanced~
~smooth and sleek~
it fits my hand so
well and allows
me to feel
~ ~ graceful ~ ~
the first time of
the day that I
feel like a
scholarly lady

and of course I do not
think as fast with
pen as I do
with keys clicking
but ponder more ~
it is most rewarding
because thoughts
of how others
would pen
the next line comes to me
and I visit
with them momentarily
here in the softness
of my robed moment

and visit mentally
serving tea
or wine
and I might use crystal or plastic
but no one will mind,
and amid much laughter
of good times yet
to be shared
I may even
laugh out loud for a
brief moment
alone

at this picture in my
mind
for there are many of you
in my room
just now

the soft chattering of
all the poetic voices are
causing me to relax
and become the
quiet soul
that I really am
because listening is
an art
and one that I
might be perfect in
and have perfected in
as I am still the shy duck
I've always been

so in the comfort
of my robe
here in the thought
of all of you
whom have comforted
the inner me
I come and write
thank you
for giving me a
place to place
my silent voice

so that I may
quietly always
be heard





Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-11-18 12:26 PM


Karilea, you have just put me in there with you. These words are so clear and the setting so perfect and your thoughts so open and sincere I can feel you writing them. You have painted a beautiful, quiet, tranquil and almost reverent scene with this poem and I am very happy to be there with you...
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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2 posted 2000-11-18 12:29 PM


Sunshine:  a lovely read - I loved the last line:                 so that I may
                      quietly always
                      be heard
Well done   Roniece

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3 posted 2000-11-18 08:49 AM


'Deer, thanks for visiting...just some lovely thoughts after an unusual day...

Roniece, thank you for visiting, and Welcome to Passions...a most unique place...enjoy your stay...and stay long...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




jwesley
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4 posted 2000-11-18 10:47 AM


Wonderful and very well written, Sunshine, and quite jealous here as I was going to write a piece in this same direction (the coming home part of my day) but you have so grabbed and run with and extended it that my miserable thoughts are buried in the footsteps of your passing.  Jealous yes, but sad, no, because I would much rather all eyes see this than my miserable attempt.  **Accolades aplenty** my friend.

jwesley

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-11-18 10:50 AM


Oh, much applause here Karilea! What an enchanting and quiet read. You've taken me right there with you as well ... you've set a beautiful mood in this lovely piece, great writing!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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6 posted 2000-11-18 01:38 PM


James, I would very much like to see any effort that you might pen, so please do...and let me know where it is should I miss it...and thank you...

Kit, thanks for joining the party...wasn't it fun?


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Sven
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7 posted 2000-11-18 01:44 PM


just wonderful Karilea. . . like having a Open Mic reading right here. . .  

-------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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8 posted 2000-11-18 02:57 PM


Kari, this is wonderful, and I've got the perfect spot for this gathering of poetic souls. Opposite my house is an orchard, well actually there are three, but there in the orchard in whatever weather would be sublime. And for those who don't like the rain constantly pouring down on them there's an oast house right in the middle of the orchards.
This really is a beautifully written and utterly wonderful piece of work. I really love this. Now anyone for cider, perry or a good old fashioned cuppa.   It's an orchard what else would I offer?  
Take care
               Majestic Marsha


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

JOY 14
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9 posted 2000-11-18 05:07 PM


Oh, Sunshine. This was so peaceful. One of the most graceful, beautiful poems I've read in a long time, I mean it.
I too was sitting right there with you. God bless.
I have to go print this now.

Joy


Gather ye rosebuds while ye may,
Old time is still a-flying,
And this same flower that smiles today
To-morrow will be dying.

-Robert Herrick


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10 posted 2000-11-19 07:23 AM


but see Sven, in this setting no need for a microphone, everyone is pleasantly relaxed, and the poetry flows....thank you...

Marsha, what is an "oast" house? Now you've colored me curious...so thanks for the invite to the orchard, sounds like a wonderful place...{~,^}

Joy, you've printed this? Wow!  Thank you!


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Marsha
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11 posted 2000-11-19 07:53 AM


Kari, an Oast House, they were the houses built for drying the hops. (Hops are used to make beer.) This being Kent and there being loads of hop gardens about, there had to be the houses where they dried them. They're sort of round in shape, a bit like a tower. I'll try to look out a picture of one and send it to you. And if I can't find one I'll go and take a pic for you.
And you're welcome Kari, I think you would like it too.
Take care
                  Majestic Marsha
                          


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Sunshine
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12 posted 2000-11-22 12:13 PM


I'm always learning new things...

we've got to love the Internet...

thanks, Marsha!


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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