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The Finale |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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The bombs are showering confetti In the western evening sky And the colors were the finale That we hoped would never die The ash on my jacket’s molding Rainbow’s vibrant suckling hue Flower blossoms strike atoms might We shout that love must ensue As I step from the past unsteady In the Mirrored Hall of Maze The savored secret that life was all This light amongst the haze The whirling thunder of crash mixed in Crescendo with pseudo-doom And all of the lover’s cries beat out Swept away with the hourglass broom Here the gusts of war make love Will lovers soon unite? The finale’s just the beginning The fallout’s a wondrous sight [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The Finale is indeed just the beginning... Through the fallout, of course, is a wayout way of looking at things..  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I will meet you in the Mirrored Hall of Maze.... great line! and I can see it now... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx nan where e'er you are... page 3 no replies is a lonley place sunshine you know you are the best o yuh |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Very insightful; you've made me think and....I like it!!!!  Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Swept away with the hourglass broom" It's so nice to read such variety in your work Walt ... this is beautifully written, very vivid, nicely done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ You are such a flower-child ... This just explodes into memories - 'The savored secret that life was all This light amongst the haze' Ponder of wonder. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The grand finale wil not be all that nice but this poem is really is I loved it all Walt.. don't know what to say...I know you're serious when you say.."Here the gusts of war make love." Man I know somethings happening then..yep! |
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Mattster Junior Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 29 |
wayoutwalt, Your poem contains quite a few great lines. "And the colors were the finale That we hoped would never die" "The finale’s just the beginning The fallout’s a wondrous sight" Excellent. |
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compassion Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 135USA |
oh good write, what can I say? Get a grip |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i thank you all yuh very kind to read my poem. now off to read yours i hope |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
A nice metrical form, Walt. Your moral, patriotic and yet sardonic "voice" rings loud and clear in this lively, cerebral and sober piece of writing. Good work, very powerful. Rainy |
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