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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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LITERALLY “Literally”, she says, “I should not take your poetry so literally”. Of course it’s not me she speaking to, but a voice from the past. A voice that still calls her. Maybe not literally, maybe even subconsciously, But it still calls her just the same… And, as every time before, she answers. I watch from a distance, cold in the suffering. I see the yearning in her eyes, The delicate wordings she uses to address the then with the now… Paraphrasing need, that wound she tries so desperately to conceal and Succeeds in doing for the most part, With a communal shrug… All while another little piece of hope Is eclipsed from my soul. Ah, to remember the fire those eyes once embellished. The song they poured forth. To remember how, once, I thought it for me She was singing… But have to admit with the diminishing Of the muse, even as her beauty stands unequalled in the depths of my mind, That silence, indeed, speaks what words were never meant to… Yet tonight, as I hold her in my arms, She’ll tell me it’s me that she loves. My heart will refill in the wanting, My eyes overflow in the joy And I’ll love her with every part of me… Knowing, when all but the silence has passed, As she lies still in dreaming, It could never be enough, Literally. Michael Anderson But dreams of those who dream as I, Aspiringly, are damned and die. EAP |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Just when we think we're reading the best, Michael comes along and leaves dust on everything he passes.... literally... Wow.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Michael, a very powerful telling piece. It brings me to a time in my past, that still carry's some discomfort with it. I hope for you this is more imagined then truth. Parker |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Can I have my air back please? I seem to have lost it a few stanzas back.. As I was reading, I could see the speaker pondering from a distance. Almost a detached distance...while watching uncontrollable things happen. That's one thing remarkable about your poetry - you leave enough open for the readers' personal interpretation - and that gives it more 'feel'. Knowwhatimean? I liked this, m'friend. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I think methinks you keep outdoing yourself...this is a true thing of beauty, Michael...very tender, and full of longing and the quiet sharing that is your trademark. Beautiful!!! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey Michael,... what Sunshine said... and then some... Be well, my friend..  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Michael-- as always your work inspires me and touches deep within. this particular piece really "spoke" to me...the sad- ness throughout it blended quite wonderfully with the beauty. i hope that this isn't really what's going on. *hugs* my friend. take care. ~amy~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You are one of the best poets I know. Literally Each poem you write, each line, each word is crafted with such emotion and truth that it's a work of art. Literally You are always in my thoughts, my friend. I look forward to the day when 'Voices on the Web' is published and the world will get a glimpse of your talent. It will blow them away!! Literally |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
As all the others before me said...VERY WELL DONE, my friend. jwesley |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Michael, great to read something fresh, and this is so different, I liked it very much. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
“Literally”, she says, “I should not take your poetry so literally”. **Of course it’s not me she speaking to, but a voice from the past. A voice that still calls her.** ================== **I watch from a distance, cold in the suffering. I see the yearning in her eyes, The delicate wordings she uses to address the then with the now…** Paraphrasing need, that wound she tries so desperately to conceal ================== **All while another little piece of hope Is eclipsed from my soul.** Ah, to remember the fire those eyes once embellished. The song they poured forth. To remember how, once, I thought it for me She was singing… **But have to admit with the diminishing Of the muse, even as her beauty stands unequalled in the depths of my mind, That silence, indeed, speaks what words were never meant to…** Yet tonight, as I hold her in my arms, She’ll tell me it’s me that she loves. My heart will refill in the wanting, My eyes overflow in the joy **And I’ll love her with every part of me… Knowing, when all but the silence has passed, As she lies still in dreaming, It could never be enough,** Literally. ==================== M, I dont know if I have the words to tell how much or why this poem touches and effects me ... please just know it reaches a place deep, a place that has not been moved by a poem in a long time...but that needed to be..more than even I realized...so I thank you for that .. so many times now your poems have done this... this one is so amazing in its honest, sincere, depth of emotion and expression. my oh my -- poet of grace ...I have missed your exceptional poetry. take care poetic love and respect jm |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I watch from a distance, cold in the suffering. I see the yearning in her eyes, The delicate wordings she uses to address the then with the now… Paraphrasing need, that wound she tries so desperately to conceal and Succeeds in doing for the most part, With a communal shrug… All while another little piece of hope Is eclipsed from my soul." Excellent Michael, I don't tire of saying that I so enjoy your work ... you always make me think.  This left me pondering the many past experiences that we each carry with us from one phase of life to another ... each expereince always a part of us, though sometimes surfacing to haze the reality of "now" ... beautifully expressed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Sunshine, me thinks you give me way too much credit but I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Parker, often the purging of my emotion holds a bleaker aspect than really is intended... LOL I guess my imagination does seem to overwhelm me at times... hehehe Nicole, It's almost too easy to for a person to detach himself/herself these days as the events of their lives unfold before them don't you think? But, indeed, I try to make each reader "feel" my emotion the same, if from their own personal vantage points. Good to see you again, dear...Serenity, Oops, I showed my "tender" side again... LOL I really think I should stop that. One might think I'm turning soft in my old age... Nan, very well, my friend... Glad you enjoyed, also. Amy, really things are fine where I stand. Looking forward to wonderful, shared Christmas for the first time in many years over here. Hope all is well with you, too. Sharon, looking very forward to the publishing of "Voices" but not just to see my own works in there... But the works of so many of my friends, yourself included. jwesley, thank you for the compliment. Irish Rose, well, I have to agree, this is VERY different for me. Wasn't exactly sure how it would be received at first. Glad you found it to your liking. Janet, always glad to know my poetry "touches" you. Hope you are doing well these days. You take care too... Kit, you always are "Right On" in your perceptions of my work. This poem really is about how The Past is always with us, and will haunt us if we allow it to. How it keeps our eyes from realizing the beauty of what is before us "right now" at times. Your understanding amazes me. Thank you. ...and thank you all for the kind replies. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Michael, You got fine press on this one and well you deserved it. A wonderful piece of writing. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*bump* because we all like seeing your name again...grin... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Michael you steal my breath as you always do with your deep set emotion and powerful message...I see the reflection of my life in your words...the future blurred in the nightmares of the past....Excellent weaving...I've missed your work here...a pleasure to find you here~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
excellent work... "As another smile passes my lips on display for his eyes alone I pray, this longing remains covered in overgrown desires among secret places unmet by the one yet to come, who can fulfill them..." -Tier |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
What lies in the past cannot be completely erased and haunts the present. You deserve the purity you long for. Corinne |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
what a great intense piece here!!!!!!!!! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This poem certainly strokes the emotions. This very moment will always be a reflection of our past...James |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
You know something.... I could have changed alot of words in this to fit myself. Very Very nice my friend. I see a growing here in a diferent direction. I should keep my mouth shut sometimes... VERY nice my friend... Very very nice. Best Wishes, dale |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Michael, you always give me the good ole goose bumps o yuh...thanx for the poem |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
We haul so much baggage around with us... (and it's usually not attractive designer luggage but battered and torn duffle bags always underfoot to trip us. *S*) This is excellent, Michael... as always! |
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