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aurora rain Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 90 |
You sit and I row back the years, flipping them like the pages from last week’s precursory statements. And there is nothing left from sixteen onwards as I repulse the love from underneath and the curtain flies to the right, a haphazardly-broken ideal embraced in the fancy of a new day and the purity of half-struck light. And as you become less ordinate I find the detail in your lies remarkable, the beauty of them somewhat hard to believe. I cry (and I rush to the territorial, and I rush to the proverbial, and I rush rush into your arms because nowhere else is not far from here) And then, there, the milk dominates the sideways-turning fury of your need for reassurance, and your need for purifiance your need for closure and clarity bound halfway through the pages. I know your subtlety relies on perspicacity, and something I cannot give. I lie to the minister sometimes, and I lie to the priest, and I sing your sway, sometimes, the sublimity surreal. And I’d give away the summer solstice to flip back to page fourteen where I could forgive. I’d let the logic float away back to November so I could sing you to sleep for the last time, in yellow-spun rhyme and let you shut the back door and hear the shatter-pierce of glass light the fire at noon in the hopes I could remember. I do (and I sell the gown you gave me for two candles; autumn rain, and a little box to hold the letters in) [This message has been edited by aurora rain (edited 11-17-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is quite deep, a great read, Aurora, If I haven't welcomed you, "Welcome!" "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"and I rush rush into your arms because nowhere else is not far from here" "And I’d give away the summer solstice to flip back to page fourteen where I could forgive. I’d let the logic float away back to November so I could sing you to sleep for the last time, in yellow-spun rhyme" Excellent!Very powerful verse, verbiage, imagery... fine writing. Welcome to the blue pages.  will look for more by you |
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aurora rain Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 90 |
thanks.  i think i have found a great forum here, although i might be much younger than the lot of you. (i'm seventeen) |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Aurora, At seventeen the talent really shows. We want to keep you here at Passions. I enjoy your writing. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AuroraRain~ Wow ! Such depth to your writing. You've much talent, young lady. 'You sit and I row back the years, flipping them like the pages from last week’s precursory statements. And there is nothing left from sixteen onwards as I repulse the love from underneath and the curtain flies to the right, a haphazardly-broken ideal embraced in the fancy of a new day and the purity of half-struck light' I will look for more of your writings. Welcome to the wonderful world of Passions. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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