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Aimster
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0 posted 2000-11-17 12:32 PM


"Ocean of Lies"

Can you not see the pain you cause her
Or is it simply that you do not care
The weight of your sins and shame
She can no longer bare

Quietly I've stood in the shadows
But now it's time I had my say
Your actions speak louder than your words
And for that you shall pay

I am not here to judge
But you break her heart time and time again
As if her life is some sort of game
That you play, wanting to win

She is your daughter
Yet you treat her so cold
And I'm really tired of just watching
This is way past being old

I know you think I'm nothing
And I am just talking to a wall
I am only trying to warn you
Before you trip and take your final fall

The lies you have told her
Are slowly ripping her apart
You are not only destroying her soul
But you are tearing out her heart

If the light in her eyes ever goes out
I shall never forgive you
She is more precious than you will ever know
You seriously have no clue

You cast your sins and shame upon her
And use her like a pawn
I should have seen this was happening
Been going on for so very long

I don't pretend to understand the whys
Some things are just meant to be
But I promise you one thing
From these chains she will be released, and her soul will fly free

Your game stops here and now
She is your daughter, not some pawn to use
Plain and simple
I will no longer tolerate this abuse

My mother is gone, never to come back
You have no idea what you're throwing away
Take a look into her eyes, you'll see her beauty
I do each and every single day


© Copyright 2000 Amy Kennedy - All Rights Reserved
Marsha
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1 posted 2000-11-17 12:57 PM


Amy, this is so so brilliant, utterly wonderful. I really love this, it is full of power. It is full of your determination to sieze control back from those who have been abusing their power. Such a good write from you, utterly wonderful.
Great work Amy girl.
Take care
              Mushy Marsha
                    


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Irish Rose
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2 posted 2000-11-17 01:14 PM


This is full of anger, good, you got it out, keep writing.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen



SEA
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3 posted 2000-11-17 01:33 PM


Amy~ give her hell and make her take it!!   This is really a fantastic poem from you.....anger isn't always bad........ -SEA
snowpants
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4 posted 2000-11-17 06:04 PM


'If the light in her eyes ever goes out
I shall never forgive you
She is more precious than you will ever know
You seriously have no clue'

Aimsters--wow!  This is extremely powerful.  My friend, you have expressed yourself wonderfully here.  Excellent write!

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I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

kat
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5 posted 2000-11-17 06:10 PM


Amy:  This is extremely powerful and full of emotions. I hope the light in her eyes never goes out. Great poem. Loved it!  

kat

Daniel J D
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6 posted 2000-11-17 06:27 PM


Amy,
Powerful, strong and courageous, you have it all. Great to see you standing up to an obvious problem. I am here to listen, come to me anytime, remember. Beautiful poem.

"Quietly I've stood in the shadows
But now it's time I had my say"

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

kaile
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7 posted 2000-11-18 10:44 AM


a powerful intense read..thank you for sharing(that must have been hard to write) and i do hope you will have strength and corage to do as you deem fit
Aimster
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8 posted 2000-11-18 12:50 PM


Marsha-
your kind words brought tears to my
eyes. thank you my friend. you are
heaven sent   take care.

Irish Rose-
I intend to. I have many more feelings
than just anger regarding this situation
that I need to get out in the "open".
Thank you for reading and responding!

SEA-
LOL at your comment. She deserves some
hell that's for sure. And yes very true.
Sometimes anger is a good thing, it's
all in how you handle it. Thanks for
your response.  

Kris-
well eeksters coming from you i take
what you said as a very high compliment.
i'm glad you enjoyed this. ô¿ô take care
my sweet friend.

kat-
thank you. I hope it never does either.
she's my one true soul mate and means
the world to me. appreciate your kind
reply.

Daniel-
thank you my friend for your support
and words of encouragement. it means
so very much to me.  

Kaile-
I thank you for your wonderful comment
about this poem. And yes I do think
I have the strength to make it through
this. Thanks again!

Take care all. Love ya much...
~amy~

Victoria
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9 posted 2000-11-18 01:00 PM


nicely written amy ..as always.. a sad poem indeed..i hope they can work things out one day..

                ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Aimster
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10 posted 2000-11-19 11:53 AM


Victoria--

thanks for reading & responding!
i hope they can too. *crossing fingers*.
Take care.
~amy~

CocoBaci
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11 posted 2000-12-14 11:32 PM



Amy, this is touching and sad as you know already and it's also a great write from your heart and mind onto this screen I look at tonite...

Me wants 2 send U Hugggggggggggz cus I think you're a sweet friend and please keep on writing PoetLady...

Coco

[This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-14-2000).]

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
12 posted 2000-12-14 11:46 PM


coco~
how sweet of you to bring this back up!
and thank you ever so much for your
touching reply. i got a huge smile on my
face now. take care *hugs*
~amy~

~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~


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