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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
It was in the freefall Acceptance when I closed my eyes facing the reality of having to go within to ever make it out of my chains rusted by years of tears Your voice warm and deep guiding me through places I vowed never to return Reaching me through my rivers of tears intermingled with pain and fear Red and black Falling through darkness with a bare thread of hope held by the strength of your heart to which I clung tightly and finally landing in your arms "Open your eyes" you said gently "You're free" And before me stood a world overflowing with richness shining brightly with clarity and the man who holds my heart To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ohhhhh, I do like this a lot.......what a sweet heart-felt poem.......I loved the ending, that safe and loved feeling is everything isn't it?  -SEA |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dreamkeeper- i LOVE this!  '"Open your eyes" you said gently "You're free" And before me stood a world overflowing with richness shining brightly with clarity and the man who holds my heart' such a happy and hopeful ending.. enjoyed this. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Sea - Thank you.........yes, thank god for happy endings! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Whoopsie.....hit the button too fast. Thank you so much Vicky! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Dreamkeeper... my compliments for a great write and I enjoyed this read thank you |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"when I closed my eyes facing the reality of having to go within to ever make it out" wonderful writing! thank you for a fine read... haven't read you before but will be looking for more... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the light at the end of the tunnel. . . hope that we all can see it. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
dreamkeeper, the title pulled me in and im glad it did |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Just lovely DreamKeeper! A captivating journey as if falling then being so wonderfully swept back up into the caring arms of another ... beautiful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DreamKeeper~ A lovely write that lands in the promise of hope. I enjoyed it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sort of like the first time skydiving that freefall is hard to do but when you touch the surface of mother earth you know you've experienced an exilerating feeling...like breaking free and finding love all over again good work!! |
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compassion Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 135USA |
This is a wonderful write...BoyOboy can I relate. Good job...and must agree with Ethom-just hit the ground running. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Reaching me through my rivers of tears intermingled with pain and fear Red and black Falling through darkness with a bare thread of hope held by the strength of your heart to which I clung tightly and finally landing in your arms "Open your eyes" you said gently "You're free" ================== this is very well written... you express many emotions with depth and clarity... lovely writing of promise and anticipation found in trusting another... very nice indeed take care jm "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
Lightest Kisses Take The Salt From Your Eyes Arms Wrapped About Home Entering The TranceDance The Worlds Within The IEyes United In Life The Woman The Man Two Hearts Once Broken Now Bound By Twin Souls Beat Strong Ever Stronger As Two Become Forever Become One |
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