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Cloud Haiku |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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Soft cotton pillows~ Skipping gaily across sky~ Soaking up grey moods |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
I love Haiku. this is well done. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"Soft cotton pillows~ Skipping gaily across sky~ Soaking up grey moods" Beneath the softness Eyes fill, dimensions of you Forming in the blue ~Wynter thoughts forming from your soft ones "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like it.. I like it...  |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I love this poem. It reminds me of days spent watching the skies as a child. -Tier |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
kaile- beautiful haiku, my friend.  such lovely sentiment here. hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Wonderful haiku. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
*sigh* where's a good hill when you want one? great haiku kaile. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kaile~ WONDERFUL imagery ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Snow~ i love it too. glad you liked this attempt beautiful thoughts, wynter..thank you im glad you did, Nan  Tier, yes, watching the clouds is still one of my favourite past times im glad you understood thank you for the compliment, viraynes glad to share with a fellow haikuist, poeminister or a big open grass field where you can just lie back and enjoy thank you, Marge thank a lot, guys...i have been having an acute cae of haiku block and it feels great that i have penned something that is quite well received |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Beautiful writing...haiku's take much talent and practice and this is done to perfection~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Very pretty. Thanks for soaking up my grey mood tonight. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this has gotta be the best haiku i ever read no lie.. i just love how you wrapped it all together |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
weeeeeeeeeeelllll...it's not the BEST I ever read, but it is pretty good Makes me want to find a grassy field to lie in |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
animals fluff white across the skies they fly swift making laughter sing Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
What a beautiful Haiku!!! I personally love them and you have created one to remember. Loved the imagery it lends us. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoyed it!! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Great Haiku, please post more I loved it! Regards, Olias. |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kaile, your haiku is is descriptive using texture and features of like cotton and and having these cloud interact with feelings is a creative combination. Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
This is GOOD!  I can picture the cotton clouds, sweeping across the sky, taking along with it the 'grey', like a cloth wiping off dust._,,,^.^,,,_ |
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