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FlyHigh
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 84
Bekkestua, Norway

0 posted 2000-11-17 02:10 AM


sightless I watch you
footprints marking blackest pitch
clinging to forever

despair awakens
adhesive fear engulfing
transpiring all joy

sores sighs soundlessly
evil spawn softly whispers
dawn of refuge hides


Is this haikus? Not sure. Maybe posted in wrong forum also. Oh well...

gJ

--
"Luck affects everything. Let your hook always be cast; in the stream where you least expect it there will be a fish."
Ovid (BC 43-18 AD)


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passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
1 posted 2000-11-17 04:14 AM


looks like it to me! I liked the first one best
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
2 posted 2000-11-17 08:00 AM


FlyHigh,
Yep definitely Haikus. looks like the right forum too unless you prefer dark for these.
Write on
Kethry


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Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
3 posted 2000-11-17 08:08 AM


enjoyed all...

*smiles*
-Tier

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