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To Keep up the Good Search |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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To Keep up the Good Search To begin on white with some lopsided twisted thought a calypso from the past perhaps or the rock where I stubbed my toe it is all like chicken scratches numbering my thoughts click click faster now they come like black birds winged and mighty and dark dark they sing across my la la la in sharps that pierce my naked longing and they discord too rumble like the far left of piano thunder trouble sad sound and I listen as if to pick out a melody that would explain but I cannot tell you of auburn hair or of scarlet wishes cannot march you into my cadence so you can keep time how can you keep time I have been trying but my poem slips and I am off in circles again falling into rivers even the waterfall hears me coming and winks with sunlight for the joy of tossing me about Gentle is the wander when I float on wings of garden roses and prick my skin to feel the sun fill up all my surfaces with surprise and then today I lost my count and I whispered to the soft air where where is my lost thought and it lay me down again on this white page where I have clicked my life and said someday you will see but for now you must keep up the good search. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie what wonderful reasoning and what a beautiful poem to start this new open....I guess we were all steaming in here at the same time and the last open was full...oh well you have really kicked it off with a good one..ethome...... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Yes, we must all keep up the good search... I just love it, Martie, the way your mind works,, cannot march you into my cadence so you can keep time How wonderful is that?????  |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
One day Martie I shall borrow (  ) the best line or two from every one of your poems and write the most wonderful poem in the world....you are amazing Philip |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Speechless I am - filled with awe and wonder - When my poems won't fall in place, When the words won't come, When words and phrases go to the shelf awaiting the whim of my muse, I've always been unable to put it into words. At least nothing remotely poetical; but you, miraclous you, do it with such beauty and grace - I'm speechless - unable to find adequate laudatory words for your talent. I can only hope you find in this plethora of words some semblance of my appreciation for your talent. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
well, the good search yielded this fantastic piece that simply talked my talk...although I might never walk your walk, Martie, I shall indeed enjoy traipsing into my own Private Library to read and re-read this treasure for as long as Passions exists... uh, Ron? If EVER you decide to shut the doors, let me know so I can print this keeper for a hard copy! Martie, thanks! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I hate it when I miss hitting the right buttons....{~,^} Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thanks ethome--I always enjoy your replies. Balladeer--You love the way my mind works...maybe you can explain it to me then. ..thanks deer one.Philip--you have given me an idea...hmmm.. Bill--your plathora is wonderful...thank you so much for such praise...especially when I had to stretch so far to find this poem...I appreciate your enthusiasm. Sunshine--coming from a poet that I admire so much...this is a wonderful reply...thank you so much! (You can hit any button you want) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I felt you reaching ... and you found the place to take it. Just so very, very unique is your talent. Have I said that before ? Well ... I would suspect that I'll say it again and again as each thought that you maintain is gifted to us in your writing. 'I am off in circles again falling into rivers even the waterfall hears me coming and winks with sunlight for the joy of tossing me about' How much I enjoy your circles. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
they sing across my la la la in sharps that pierce my naked longing and they discord too rumble like the far left of piano thunder trouble sad sound and I listen as if to pick out a melody that would explain but I cannot tell you of auburn hair or of scarlet wishes cannot march you into my cadence so you can keep time how can you keep time I have been trying but my poem slips and I am off in circles again falling into rivers even the waterfall hears me coming and winks with sunlight for the joy of tossing me about Gentle is the wander when I float on wings of garden roses and prick my skin to feel the sun fill up all my surfaces with surprise and then today I lost my count and I whispered to the soft air where where is my lost thought and it lay me down again on this white page where I have clicked my life and said someday you will see but for now you must keep up the good search. =============== "Gentle is the wander when I float on wings of garden roses" and you take us there ... and its poetry in motion ... and its perfection of verse every time and searching with you...for you--in between your lines... yes..it tis a good thing later-gentle wander on my mind gator jm |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Martie ... this piece is a wonderful journey through your thoughts. Your words cascade with such a melodic flow, just lovely to read. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--You always manage to make me feel so good...must be a sis thing. Janet--I wish I found my mind as interesting as you do...sometimes it feels like there's nothing there. Kit..thank you so much for your sweet words. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Gentle is the wander when I float on wings of garden roses and prick my skin to feel the sun fill up all my surfaces with surprise And then today I lost my count and I whispered to the soft air where where is my lost thought and it lay me down again ============================================= Martie, I'm getting my fix tonite and I hope you don't mind but your poems seem to reel me in and captivate me in your thoughts you express so eloquently.... Boy o boy, you have a way of expression I have never seen before and you're an inspiration to me in many ways... coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-07-2000).] |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Coco--Mind? no way...I'm very flattered that you like my poetry...thank you so much for bringing this one back up. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
would be an awful long search to be able to find another poem as enjoyable as this treasure... you are a veritable poetic wonder my friend... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You did well with this one! I know you put a lot into it, it reads deeper with each reading. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--I'm always glad to see you, my friend...I've missed you. Kathleen--I'm so glad you stopped to read my poem...I appreciate your words of reply very much. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I hope I will continue to enjoy your 'searches' for quite some time to come! Denise |
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