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Sven
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0 posted 2000-11-16 11:12 PM


eastern                                                western
star                                                      light
            shine                            sparkle
            this                               this
            day                               night
                        tell       share
                        your     your
                        story    heart
            to                                 with
            us                                 our
            here                              lives
we’ll                                                    we
listen                                                    know




[This message has been edited by Sven (edited 11-16-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
Temptress
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1 posted 2000-11-16 11:53 PM


Interesting way of writing.   I like it !

ethome
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2 posted 2000-11-16 11:58 PM


That's very creative Sven!  clever idea..and I really like how the words tie in.... very good!! ethome
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3 posted 2000-11-17 02:05 AM


it's takes the right
kind of poem and a
person with patience
to be able to do concrete
poetry and do it well!

I'm impressed!

kaile
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4 posted 2000-11-17 03:31 AM


Awwww....thank you Sven for this sweet gesture (my eyes nearly popped right out when i saw this dedication)

No,no, the honour is mine...i have delightful times getting to know all of you here and anticipate more such great moments...

thanx for your willingness to listen to me though


tracie66
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5 posted 2000-11-17 03:35 AM


Sven~
Very impressive piece both in structure and content...well done and well penned for one such as Kaile
~HUG~
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe



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6 posted 2000-11-17 11:35 AM


Kaile must be a star in the heavens to have provoked such an interesting tribute...

well done to both the muse, and the mused...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Sven
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7 posted 2000-11-17 12:18 PM


Temptress, thank you!!  

ethome, thank you. . . that's just what I wanted. . .  

Snow, thank you. . . glad that I could make an impression. . . this did take a little patience. . . but the end result made it all worth while. . .

tracie, thank you. . . this was fun to do. . . just have to remember to count the spaces next time!  

Sunshine, he brings together a lot of things in his writing. . . and I tried to show that here. . .thank you my friend. . .

Kaile, thank you for letting us hear you. . . it's been an honor to read your work and to have you here. . . and to call you friend. . . I look forward to reading more of your work. . .thank you again. . .

------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Kethry
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8 posted 2000-11-18 07:38 AM


Sir Sven,
you did this amazingly well. I loved it. A loving tribute.
write on
Kethry


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9 posted 2000-11-18 08:55 PM


Sven,

Well done my friend.  Beautiful format . . . just like the yin and the yang.  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

kaile
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10 posted 2000-11-22 09:22 PM


it has been a pleasure to read your work too, Sven and thank you so much for the compliment about "bringing together many things in his writing"..much appreciated
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