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Balladeer
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0 posted 2000-11-16 09:59 PM



My heart is in each written word to see
My soul rings out within the melody
My mind is represented by each line
All thoughts that you uncover there are mine.

My blood flows to the pages through my pen
My stanzas are the standards I have been
Outlook on life fill paragraphs complete
My views are in each phrase one's eyes may meet.

My dreams and hopes are there for one to read
My wishes written down call out my need
Desire runs rampant through each word in view
My love is there in everything I do.

You say you want to know the real me?
It's all there in my words of poetry.

© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2000-11-16 10:02 PM


Balladeer--and you are wonderful...because all of your poetry is true and honest and brave and sensitive and commpassionate and funny...oh, I could go on and on...In other words..you are wonderful!
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2 posted 2000-11-16 10:03 PM


In every line I have seen
the poet that you have alway been
the words the rhyme the magic-trie...
the rhymes that you begin with me
the thoughts the hopes the lines that be
Balladeer...winsome thoughts, but not we...

'Deer...fantastic!  the first, most warmest, view I have ever seen!  


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-11-16 10:10 PM


My dreams and hopes are there for one to read
My wishes written down call out my need
Desire runs rampant through each word in view
My love is there in everything I do.

You say you want to know the real me?
It's all there in my words of poetry.

=================
sweet soulful sonnet ... my fav ..
poetry in motion...
and yes...windows on our soul...
and the REAL you ...
is an amazing view  
another sonnet of deer-perfection ...
keep em coming
later-sonnet-sir-gator
jm

Daniel J D
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4 posted 2000-11-16 10:22 PM


Balladeer,
The last two lines says it all. Very well written, good work.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Rosebud1229
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5 posted 2000-11-16 10:33 PM


Your quite astounding if this be true, Your pen doth flow with blood from your veins, and feeling surpass each sentence that you write, wow just astounding Balladeer.
doreen peri
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6 posted 2000-11-16 11:03 PM


ain't it the truth!   your poetry is very YOU and says so much about all you are!!
enjoyed every word of it, too

you are so very good with words!! you also have a way of saying the right words at the right times for the person who's just waiting to listen... and oh how i love listening to you!

       

[This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 11-17-2000).]

inot2B
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7 posted 2000-11-17 12:04 PM


I think she got the message.
You do have a way with words.

Balladeer
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8 posted 2000-11-17 12:09 PM


Martie....WOW! Go on..go on...! Thank you for such wonderful words. Coming from someone I admire as much as you, they mean a lot    

sunshine...thank you for reading my lines...and taking the time to view    

Janet MArie...keep em coming? With an audience like you, how can I stop?? Thank you, golden voiced one    

Dainel J D...yes, they do. I thank you, sir.

rosebud1229..you are very kind and I thank you    

Doreen....thank you. Hopefully you know how important your thoughts are to me.


inot2B....ya think??   My thanks.....  



[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 11-17-2000).]

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9 posted 2000-11-17 12:33 PM


Balladeer.....nice to meet you.....  
its a pleasure to know that behind the terrific poetry hide a precious poet....oops....I mean Man....

it was a pleasure to read me....but its always a pleasure to read your poetry.
excellent as always.

((hugs))
Charisma



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10 posted 2000-11-17 01:40 AM


Bal, indeed a true poet behind the mask.....
errr, not that I mean your wearing a mask or anything.... its just a figure of speach.
You look good with or without a mask.  
Well, you write great poetry, so who'll notice.  

peppermint35
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11 posted 2000-11-17 02:37 AM


Yes!!!  Poetry is a window to the soul; isn't it?   And since that is true, may I say that you have a lovely soul

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

Kethry
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12 posted 2000-11-17 06:20 AM


'Deer
your poetry so plain to view
reveals the deeper inner you
your magic touch that twists the line
reveals a humor so very fine
the sensitive rendering of your pain
makes me want to hug you, hold you, once again
your spirited response the weak defends
shows your heart a man among men
a passionate spirit, a heart that's true
In your poetry I touch the "you"
I pray your spirit glowingly arrayed
through your poetry and verse is prayed
and that you will go on and on
revealing "you" through poem and song.
Keth


Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed?
Rex E. Alford

Kit McCallum
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13 posted 2000-11-17 08:05 AM


Smiling here Michael ... this holds such truth for me. What are our words, but mere reflections of ourselves, our thoughts, desires, our hopes and our pain. For those who wish to read into the lines in depth, we are there for all to see ... and what a sensitive soul you are.  You've penned a captivating Sonnet here, just beautiful. Hugs to the "you" I've come to know through your words ...

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 11-17-2000).]

Tiersdin
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14 posted 2000-11-17 08:13 AM


Awesome! and conveys, I'm sure, the feelings of most poets, mine included...

-Tier

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15 posted 2000-11-17 09:11 AM


Poetic perfection!!! This is why you Da Man!!!
Munda
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16 posted 2000-11-17 04:11 PM


  Great sonnet Balladeer!
Wilfred Yeats
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17 posted 2000-11-17 04:38 PM


you make it appear so easy -
yet the rhythm and flow of this is so perfect - I'm overwhelmed - knowing how much work it required.  Kudos my friend

Nan
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18 posted 2000-11-17 06:06 PM


I knew that... I did, I did... The first time I ever read one of your poems... ...
Irish Rose
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19 posted 2000-11-17 07:32 PM


And this is more true because your poems are simply an extension of the ink that never runs dry, the ink of kindness and compassion and heart-felt emotion. Any poet worth his salt needs that ink. < !signature-->

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen




[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 11-17-2000).]

Balladeer
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20 posted 2000-11-17 10:58 PM


Charisma....the pleasure is all mine  

Parker....ROFL!!! That comment gets loud applause here! I love it....bum!  

Peppermint...yes, it is and thank you for saying such a lovely thing  

kethry...ah, keth, your poem makes me want to hug YOU. It, and you, are special  

Kit...if our words are reflections of ourselves, I'm VERY honored to know you!

Tier...yes, I'm sure it speaks for many. Thank you...

Serenity..after reading the last cpiple of yours, you DA WOMAN!!!  

Munda....I thank you for reading  

Wilfred....I always appreciate your recognition. It means much...

Nan.....you did not! Thought I was just another pretty face, you did!!!  

Rose....yes, we need it and, judging by your poetry, your inkwell is filled to the top and overflowing!  

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21 posted 2000-11-18 08:43 AM


Balladeer~
Falling across the page in rhyme
your words get to me - everytime.

Nicely done, dear poet.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Seymour Tabin
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22 posted 2000-11-18 10:18 AM


Balladeer,
So what else is new? Like Nan I knew that the very first poem of yours I heard. Nice one. Sy

sandgrain
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23 posted 2000-11-18 10:39 AM


Often, I think that's why friends made on these forums are so much truer than those in chat rooms across the net.  We really do get to know anothers soul, but still need your great talent to express it so well. Thank you.
Denise
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24 posted 2000-11-19 10:21 PM


That's why your poems are so special!

Denise

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25 posted 2000-12-08 01:46 AM




Balladeer, you realize dear Sir, that you are one 'heck of a poet' with a heart purer than any treasure of gold...

Thank you for this read...

coco

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26 posted 2000-12-08 06:17 AM


*sigh*Though I am pretty new here I must concur with all of the above. Your words are heartfelt and from an honest depth I have never seen before. Wonderful to show us all who YOU are. Thank you, dear one, the music of this poem touches heart and soul. Much love to you from me.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com


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