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Words_of_Glitter
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since 2000-10-25
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0 posted 2000-11-16 11:20 AM


He looked at me for just a minute
And never said a word
But I saw his mind and everything in it
He'd never spoken; yet I'd heard
I felt the beauty in his stare
Saw the longing in his eyes
Felt the touch that wasn't there
Heard the sadness in his sighs
And I thought that we would meet once more
If only, again, to exhange brief glances
And that was it...nothing more
But I live with my regret...for their are no second chances
I didn't get a number...I didn't even get a name
Wish you would've just walked out...but instead, into my life you came

(*Hey, this is my first sonnet. It isn't that great...but i just wanted to try something new, rather than my usual blank verse.*)




"Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without."

© Copyright 2000 Sarah Morehouse - All Rights Reserved
dragonpoe
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Palm Bay, Florida
1 posted 2000-11-16 11:24 AM


Hmm, I am not a sonnet writer, don't even know what the guidelines of writing one are.
But I like this depiction of one of those mysterious, untouchable love affairs that last the briefest of moments, but seems to  linger forever in the mind.


With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-11-16 01:09 PM


Beautiful poetry...wondeful rhyme flow and cadence
welcome to passions
its so nice to have you here...
I look forward to more of your lovely work
take care
jm

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
Lao Tze Tao

~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Elizabeth
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3 posted 2000-11-16 01:10 PM


Sarah (that's you right?   ) I liked this a lot...are we going to see more of you work? If this was your first time with rhyming poetry, you should do it more often.

Elizabeth

Celeste
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4 posted 2000-11-17 08:34 AM


I loved this.  You've touched on the emotions wonderfully.   A poem of depth.  Thank you for sharing!

To capture and live a moment is truly living

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
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Charlotte, NC
5 posted 2000-11-17 10:43 AM


This was very beautiful in my opinion!
Would love to see more of your work.
I'll keep my eye out for ya  . Take
care.
~amy~

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