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Jeffrey Carter
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0 posted 2000-11-15 02:01 PM



Dear sweet love, shall I wait for thee
Until the moon's beams no longer shine
Shall I bid thee farely well
And hope to find thee again another day
For the night's dark hath come to set upon thee
And I can do naught 'sept wait the morn's light
Yet, in the days brightness I am but a blind man
I, shalt not swear by the moon
For it is too inconstant in it's path
I, swear to thee by mine own name
That my love will be with thee always

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1 posted 2000-11-15 02:23 PM


wonderful Sir Jeffrey..thou art a fine poet.

          ~Victoria~


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2 posted 2000-11-15 02:25 PM


a beautiful declaration of love.........really  nice job with this!

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3 posted 2000-11-15 07:36 PM


Now tell the truth, were you watching Shakespeare in Love???  Kidding  
This is very different, but I like!
Marie~

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4 posted 2000-11-15 08:02 PM


Jeff,
William would be proud of thou'.

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5 posted 2000-11-15 08:18 PM


Well I must say, I am quiet impressed. I know William well ya know and he would be honored...lol.
Nice job Jeff.
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6 posted 2000-11-15 08:39 PM


Hey Jeffery you did a wonderful job here!! You captured old Willy's tongue and placed a beauty on the page...good writing!

Just a point of interest...nothing to do with your poem. Did you know that one of the best known passages in world literature is Shakespeare's " O Romeo, Romeo! Wherefore art thou Romeo?" Yet, most people misinterpret it. Juliet is not asking "Where are you Romeo?" she is asking, "Why are you Romeo? (why couldn't you be someone else so we could marry? The next lines are, "Deny thy father, and refuse thy name: Or,if thou wilt not, be but my sworn love, and I'll no longer be a Capulet.)In Elizabethan England, wherefore was the common word for why. We cannot possibly know that ( and many other changes like it) unless someone tells us the difference, and so we rely on a specialist, usually an English teacher or professor.

Just an interesting little point that very few know...check it out with your next door Shakspearean scholar and he'll tell you it's so.  take care....ethome....

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7 posted 2000-11-15 09:22 PM


Thanks all of you  

And thank you ethome for pointing that out...learn something new everyday  

Just thought I'd include my favorite passage from "Romeo and Juliet"

It is within the same scene as the one ethome mentions above ...

But to be frank, and give it thee again.
And yet I wish but for the thing I have:
My bounty is as boundless as the sea,
My love as deep; the more I give to thee,
The more I have, for both are infinite.

This is Juliet speaking from the window down to where Romeo is hiding in the brush. Ahhh...What romance there is in these few words!

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8 posted 2000-11-15 09:47 PM


Wonderful poem.   I'm a big shakespeare reader myself and love the play  Romeo and Juliet and it feels good to regard a fellow person who reads some Shakespeare outside academic regards, for sheer personal enjoyment. Nicely written.

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9 posted 2000-11-15 10:13 PM


Jeffrey, this is a beautiful piece. "Romeo and Juliet" is my favorite play, and I just love how you've captured it in this piece. Keep up the great work!  

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10 posted 2000-11-16 12:41 PM


Jeff,

Thou has much talent for writing romance my friend.  This was beautiful.  

Jenn


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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11 posted 2000-11-16 12:15 PM


POeminister, LB, an Jen

dar gracias muy mucho  

I do so love the works of Ole Willie

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12 posted 2000-11-16 01:34 PM


Dear sweet love, shall I wait for thee
Until the moon's beams no longer shine
Shall I bid thee farely well
And hope to find thee again another day
For the night's dark hath come to set upon thee
And I can do naught 'sept wait the morn's light
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say hey....you are well inspired here..
excellent Jeff ...
very cool verbiage and vocab here...
ya did old Bill Shakes proud with this..
you should try a sonnet and use this style and vocab...
youd be great at it...
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The world calls a butterfly"
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13 posted 2000-11-16 02:05 PM


Great job with this jeffrey...and Janet said..."you are well inspired here", I say, you are Will inspired here.
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14 posted 2000-11-16 02:43 PM


oh, yeah!  This is smooth

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen



Jeffrey Carter
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15 posted 2000-11-16 09:41 PM


Jan-gator....Ummmmm.....What's a sonnet?  

Martie....Hehe, yup I guess you're right

Kathleen....Smooth huh? TYVM

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16 posted 2000-11-16 10:52 PM


I LOVE Shakespeare, makes you feel like your back in that time, you have did him justice, loved your poem.
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