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The Distance Between Sighs

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SpitFire
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0 posted 11-15-2000 10:38 AM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SpitFire

The Distance Between Sighs

somehow when the stars hang like that
in ninety degree angles above your head
across the bed in glow,

the painted posies just seem so flat,
they're green against the blue of you in
lighted times as this,

and the stretch of skin between us
clumsy, the curl of pages worn
alone, somehow wakens my insides

a pungent smelling salt effect
the situation has on me and
the distance between sighs,...
screams done.

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1 posted 11-15-2000 10:46 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Wow! I just don't know what else to say to this........ -SEA
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2 posted 11-15-2000 11:15 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Oh,....my!.....

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3 posted 11-15-2000 11:18 AM       View Profile for Interloper   Email Interloper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Interloper

Spitfire ~
Please tell me what motivated this piece.  I am torn in my reading ... don't know where to go.  It has mezmerized me.
Help!

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

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SpitFire~
One powerful piece of thought ...

'a pungent smelling salt effect
the situation has on me and
the distance between sighs,...
screams done.'


Just WOW'ed ....
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 11-15-2000 12:37 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

the distance between sighs. . . is a breath. . . which is what I had to take after reading this. . .

superb. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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6 posted 11-15-2000 01:32 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Surperb, my friend.

jwesley
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7 posted 11-15-2000 01:34 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Wonderful intense and thought provoking reading...very very good work!!
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I must admit that I'm withe veryone else here, and I can't think of a thing to say...
Spitfire, understand that this is such a good thing. WOW doesn't describe this for me... but OH! Followed by a few sighs certainly does. You have composed saddness SO subtle and enchanting... and the awakening of senses, spirit, and ... and... OH! *sigh*

and the stretch of skin between us
clumsy,
~ I am in love with this line.

THANK YOU for this read.
~ Beth
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9 posted 11-15-2000 02:12 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

Spitfire-Have to admit to reading this twice, getting a different meaning with each read, but both seem to capture a sadness and also a passion that used to be, very nice write.
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~Wanted to thank all you sweet people for reading and commenting. You make my heart smile. I'd write more but I'm short on time and wanna read some of the others before it's back to my paper. Anyway, thank you, thank you!  . *Peace.
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SpitFire,

That distance can seem like an eternity my friend.  This was awesome you.  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats
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12 posted 11-16-2000 02:32 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

somehow when the stars hang like that
in ninety degree angles above your head
across the bed in glow,

=======================
and the stretch of skin between us
clumsy, the curl of pages worn
alone, somehow wakens my insides

a pungent smelling salt effect
the situation has on me and
the distance between sighs,...
screams done.
=============
you have this amazing gift for expressing so much emotion and adding a poetic kick in the butt of IMPACT ...
and doing it all in a few very well chosen
and very poetically spoken words ...

in other words...YOU ROCK ...  
awesome work here!!!!
later-less is way more-gator
jm



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The world calls a butterfly"
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~Butterflies are meant to be free~

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oh ...wow
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14 posted 08-21-2005 02:58 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Stumbled onto this and realized just how much I miss reading your work.  Simply amazing.


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