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Encompassing the World -Villanelle for the poetry workshop.
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Encompassing the World -Villanelle for the poetry workshop. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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If you practice seeing individual worth It could stretch your arm, help you sing And throw your arms around the earth And give to patience renewed birth See beauty in flowers of the fragrant spring If you practice seeing individual worth To reach in with resounding mirth Can ease great pain and suffering And throw your arms around the earth To give comfort in the narrow berth And shelter all beneath your wing If you practice seeing individual worth To straddle the world and all its girth To uphold love though everything And throw your arms around the earth To offer hope when there's a dearth And misery wraps in silken sting If you practice seeing individual worth And throw your arms around the earth < !signature--> Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford [This message has been edited by Kethry (edited 11-17-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kethry, can you hear both the loud, and the silent, applause? Well done! Very well done! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
I'm cheering you too!!! Whistles and loud bells ringing!!!!  Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh Yay Kethry! I'm just learning about this form and am vEry impressed....not surprised coming from you, but yes,...wonderful lady! Take care you. *Peace. |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
I, too, am impressed with the skill of form here. Very well done! With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very very well done you should go to the head of the class for sure...seriously, very good reading and the structure is well done! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks folks, this was a good style but I kept wanting to do an imaginary fourth line, to make it fit my style. be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
teacher's pet bump, so it can be graded Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And misery wraps in silken sting -------------- what a very cool line that is Keth... and excellent job in making this difficult style of poetry look easy ... well done jm |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Janet, thank you, as always a compliment from you is worth more than diamonds. Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hi, Kethry....I'm Nan's assistant! Your villanelle form and style is on the money. You followed the guidelines perfectly. No, just convince this old schoolteacher that sing and glowing rhyme, and you'll pass  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Balladeer, substitute teachers, bah who needs em. I spend all my time sucking up to Nan and you come along to take the class. I would say GroWING rhymes very well with sing, but that may depend on the part of the country you come from, since you're new I'm gonna give you the benefit of the doubt and change it. There happy now! Keth< !signature--> Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford [This message has been edited by Kethry (edited 11-17-2000).] |
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