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Paula Finn
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0 posted 2000-11-15 01:48 AM


story of my life
i am free...but you are not
someday we will be


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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2000-11-15 01:58 AM


Paula? with me it's the other way 'round...still a very frustrating situation, hugs to you, because I do understand the exasperation of not even being able to try....
peppermint35
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2 posted 2000-11-15 02:30 AM


Good job with this one; it doesn't take lots of words to send a message loud and clear!!!



Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Member Rara Avis
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Deep in the heart
3 posted 2000-11-15 10:29 AM


Your Haiku is great
First attempt has succeeded
You shall write many



Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


SEA
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with you
4 posted 2000-11-15 10:32 AM


Paula~ I am so jealous!! Fantastic haiku.....I wish I could do that.   -SEA
Aimster
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5 posted 2000-11-15 10:33 AM


excellent haiku. i admire your talent.
simply beautiful. take care.
~amy~

SpitFire
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6 posted 2000-11-15 10:50 AM


~A packed little one this is. Weighted and soOo well done. Take care P. *Peace.
Janet Marie
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7 posted 2000-11-15 12:17 PM


moth drawn to the flame
die to hear you say my name
lose again loves game

**********
you said it all in 3 lines girlie--
some times less is more ...
your words had all the impact
great job ...
take care
jm


Alan
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since 2000-09-12
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right next door
8 posted 2000-11-15 03:18 PM


Very good job. I wish I could write those.
you said a lot in those 3 lines

JamesMichael
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9 posted 2000-11-15 05:18 PM


Good title and this can not continue for much longer...hope you can write a new chapter....soon...James
ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
10 posted 2000-11-15 05:24 PM


Paula I don't know much about Haiku but I have to say that you said a lot here with just a few words.....anyone could take the substance and apply it to their own situation  take care    ethome
Butterflies_dont_cry
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11 posted 2000-11-15 05:33 PM


Wow Paula...so much with so few~
Daniel J D
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Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
12 posted 2000-11-15 06:07 PM


Paula,
In just three lines. Perfect.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Paula Finn
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missouri
13 posted 2000-11-16 01:23 AM


Serenity...either way its not a nice feeling huh? Thank you

Pepper...no sometimes it only takes one word

Interloper...such a sweet reply...thank you for giving me that gift

Sea...thank you sweet lady...you write beautifully

Aimster...your words are a gift...and I treasure them thanks

Spitfire...Thank you...it just seemed to write itself

JM...hi sweetie...less is more...would be nice to have a little less pain and  lot more love but as I said...story of my life thanks

Alan...you can...just try...thank you

James...oh babe I hope it doesnt...dont know how much more this ole heart can take...hugs friend

ethome...LOL I dont know much about it either but it just felt right when I started writing...thank you

Holly...yes thanks LOL

Daniel...it was an accomplishment for me...to not ramble on and on  thanks friend


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