»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #10
»
What Matters....is Gone
| Open Poetry #10 |
|
What Matters....is Gone |
|
|
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 When the only thing that matters is gone and there’s nothing here to keep you When the love that gave you reason to live takes wing and has left without you When the sun that kept you warm has set and the stars no longer twinkle in the sky When there’s no one there to hold you and all you can do is sit alone and cry When the rain won’t fall so you can dance and the rainbow won’t form so you can follow When the night songs no longer play and the lump in your throat won’t let you swallow When the petals of a rose no longer bloom and there’s nothing left here but the pain When the light in your eyes no longer shines and all you can do is scream out in vain When luna’s soft glow blinds your eyes and the caress of desire has turned to ice When the hands of time no longer move and fate squeezes your heart like a vice What do you do when the hope dies and the sun no longer kisses you at dawn Leaving your soul void of life and love so alone...when only thing that matters is gone |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Butterflies_dont_cry - All Rights Reserved | |||
Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
The one that matters most just wrote some of the finest verse I've ever read. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
||
SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
BDC~ this is heartbreaking......painful and so sad.....it comes straight from the heart....I hope it's not directly about you, I hope you are ok. Sending HUGS just in case!  -SEA |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When the sun that kept you warm has set and the stars no longer twinkle in the sky When there’s no one there to hold you and all you can do is sit alone and cry When the rain won’t fall so you can dance and the rainbow won’t form so you can follow When the night songs no longer play and the lump in your throat won’t let you swallow ===================== When luna’s soft glow blinds your eyes and the caress of desire has turned to ice When the hands of time no longer move and fate squeezes your heart like a vice What do you do when the hope dies and the sun no longer kisses you at dawn Leaving your soul void of life and love so alone...when only thing that matters is gone ===================== my goodness....who pulled the wings off me butterfly ... oh baby..I know .. you have penned a tear and a prayer here me SS Yes ...this is exactly how it feels when we that we lose sight of that flame that guides us ... this is such an emotionally beautiful piece from you girlie.. one of those days for looking back me thinks... let the sweetness of the time dry the tears love this one buttefly of heart you too  me "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
||
|
ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You sure wrote a beautiful collection of the reasons why everything that matters affects a person...and the comparison to what it would be like without these things was right on! I loved the metaphors and illustrations...very nice writing......ethome |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
BDC....I know....but you put it to word so well... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
||
|
Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
When all that matters, seems to have faded away, just begin to renew, the cycle that wants to bring you down, and fight to recover the beauty of the night, the beauty of the rainbow, sometimes I know it's so easy to give in to the gloom, but the happiness is by far better, this was such a beautiful poem no words can say how it conveyed such beauty, and reminds me of what is there though sometimes covered up in the sadness that surrounds us, but sometimes smile just because there's no reason, and maybe just for a second you'll remember the twinkling stars. |
||
|
JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Touching words..to put it mildly I cry..James |
||
|
jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Touching & beautiful bdc. As I always preach, we cherish the memories...and move on, not the easiest thing to do, but the necessary thing to do. Memories nuture. Hanging on just causes suffering, needlessly. Or to put it another way...crying in your beer get's you watery beer; but remembering how good it tasted, makes you lick your lips! jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 11-14-2000).] |
||
|
Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Holly-- few poems affect me the way this one did. something about how it just reached out to my heart brought tears to my eyes. a beautiful poem you have penned here. when all that matters is gone, you look deep inside your beautiful heart and see the love that still does remain. sometimes, life is so painful we think we can never move on...but we eventually do with the love of friends and the strength within us. as always you have touched my heart. God bless you! Love ya, ~amy~ |
||
|
Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Butterflies, "What do you do when the hope dies" You hang in there, cold as the mornings are. You hang in there, keep fighting. You hang in there, the smiles will return. I am with you all the way. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
||
|
snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'When the only thing that matters is gone and there’s nothing here to keep you When the love that gave you reason to live takes wing and has left without you' Whoa. This really touched me! You have an excellent write here, my friend. Wow. I'm suddenly at a loss for words, but this is so moving! I can definitely sympathize with these feelings, too. Absolutely loved it! sp I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
||
|
Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, Oh, my sweet friend. This one has me in tears. I know this feeling so well. Great expression and emotion you have captured in this one. I hope all is well there. Please take care. **HUGS** LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
||
|
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
My heartfelt thanks to each and every one of you! And you are right...nothing to do but smile and move on Interloper* Your reply was beautiful...I'm honestly touched~ Sea* Thanks for the Hugs...I'll be great JM* Yeppers me sis..you know how those memories can be Ethome* It's always a pleasure to hear your thoughts on my writing...thank you so much~ Sunshine* It's always an honor to see you read~ RB* Your comments and words of encouragement mean the world to me...thank you~ James* Butterfly Dries JW* Loved your thoughts *cheers* Amy-girl* No tears sweets...all is as it should be~ Daniel* It's truly and honor to receive a poetic response from you...thank you very very much~ SP* Many thanks to you for your kind response..thank you for reading~ LW* I know you above all can understand these feelings...I'm doing fine my friend...no worries hugs to you!![This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 11-14-2000).] |
||
|
peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Tears flow freely because you wrote this heartbreak so true. Your talent and ability continues to amaze me, no one can do it as well as you Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
||
|
BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh BDC ~ What heartfelt emotion is flowing through this sadly beautiful piece... Bonnie |
||
|
Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Nicely written as always..life is a struggle sometimes..but with that litle word HOPE we manage to get through it..enjoyed very much.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
||
|
EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This is a timely post my friend, What to do? indeed that is the question. Well done as always, take care! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
||
|
Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
BDC-Breathtakingly beautiful and heartfelt. Peace & Hugs. |
||
|
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Pepper* Your compliments are always so very kind..I truly wish I deserved them..thank you from the bottom of my heart~ Bonnie* Thank you so very much for your reply~ Victoria* Hope is something I hold onto everyday with both hands...thank you so much~ Eagle* Thank you...you know how much your comments always mean to me my friend~ Gemini* Thank you so much for reading~ |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 |
||
|
ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Your poetry is amazing. Every poem of yours I have read has sent echoes tearing through me, such beautiful writing! Such painful feelings. I feel too... "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
