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What Matters....is Gone

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 11-14-2000 10:30 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry



When the only thing that matters is gone
and there’s nothing here to keep you
When the love that gave you reason to live
takes wing and has left without you

When the sun that kept you warm has set
and the stars no longer twinkle in the sky
When there’s no one there to hold you
and all you can do is sit alone and cry

When the rain won’t fall so you can dance
and the rainbow won’t form so you can follow
When the night songs no longer play
and the lump in your throat won’t let you swallow

When the petals of a rose no longer bloom
and there’s nothing left here but the pain
When the light in your eyes no longer shines
and all you can do is scream out in vain

When luna’s soft glow blinds your eyes
and the caress of desire has turned to ice
When the hands of time no longer move
and fate squeezes your heart like a vice

What do you do when the hope dies
and the sun no longer kisses you at dawn
Leaving your soul void of life and love
so alone...when only thing that matters is gone

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Interloper
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1 posted 11-14-2000 10:34 AM       View Profile for Interloper   Email Interloper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Interloper

The one that matters most just wrote some of the finest verse I've ever read.  

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

SEA
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with you


2 posted 11-14-2000 10:35 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

BDC~ this is heartbreaking......painful and so sad.....it comes straight from the heart....I hope it's not directly about you, I hope you are ok. Sending HUGS just in case!   -SEA
Janet Marie
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3 posted 11-14-2000 01:42 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

When the sun that kept you warm has set
and the stars no longer twinkle in the sky
When there’s no one there to hold you
and all you can do is sit alone and cry

When the rain won’t fall so you can dance
and the rainbow won’t form so you can follow
When the night songs no longer play
and the lump in your throat won’t let you swallow

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When luna’s soft glow blinds your eyes
and the caress of desire has turned to ice
When the hands of time no longer move
and fate squeezes your heart like a vice

What do you do when the hope dies
and the sun no longer kisses you at dawn
Leaving your soul void of life and love
so alone...when only thing that matters is gone
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my goodness....who pulled the wings off me butterfly ...
oh baby..I know ..
you have penned a tear and a prayer here me SS
Yes ...this is exactly how it feels when we that we lose sight of that flame that guides us ...
this is such an emotionally beautiful piece from you girlie..
one of those days for looking back me thinks...
let the sweetness of the time dry the tears
love this one buttefly of heart
you too  
me




"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
Lao Tze Tao

~Butterflies are meant to be free~

ethome
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4 posted 11-14-2000 01:46 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

You sure wrote a beautiful collection of the reasons why everything that matters affects a person...and the comparison to what it would be like without these things was right on! I loved the metaphors and illustrations...very nice writing......ethome
Sunshine
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5 posted 11-14-2000 01:49 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

BDC....I know....but you put it to word so well...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



Rosebud1229
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6 posted 11-14-2000 02:43 PM       View Profile for Rosebud1229   Email Rosebud1229   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosebud1229

When all that matters, seems to have faded away, just begin to renew, the cycle that wants to bring you down, and fight to recover the beauty of the night, the beauty of the rainbow, sometimes I know it's so easy to give in to the gloom, but the happiness is by far better, this was such a beautiful poem no words can say how it conveyed such beauty, and reminds me of what is there though sometimes covered up in the sadness that surrounds us, but sometimes smile just because there's no reason, and maybe just for a second you'll remember the twinkling stars.
JamesMichael
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7 posted 11-14-2000 05:12 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Touching words..to put it mildly I cry..James
jwesley
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8 posted 11-14-2000 05:29 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Touching & beautiful bdc.  As I always preach, we cherish the memories...and move on, not the easiest thing to do, but the necessary thing to do.  Memories nuture. Hanging on just causes suffering, needlessly.

Or to put it another way...crying in your beer get's you watery beer; but remembering how good it tasted, makes you lick your lips!

jwesley

[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 11-14-2000).]
Aimster
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9 posted 11-14-2000 06:12 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Holly--

few poems affect me the way this one
did. something about how it just reached
out to my heart brought tears to my eyes.
a beautiful poem you have penned here.
when all that matters is gone, you look
deep inside your beautiful heart and see
the love that still does remain. sometimes,
life is so painful we think we can never
move on...but we eventually do with the
love of friends and the strength within
us. as always you have touched my heart.
God bless you!
Love ya,
~amy~
Daniel J D
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10 posted 11-14-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for Daniel J D   Email Daniel J D   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Daniel J D

Butterflies,

"What do you do when the hope dies"

You hang in there, cold as the mornings are.
You hang in there, keep fighting.
You hang in there, the smiles will return.
I am with you all the way.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)
snowpants
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11 posted 11-14-2000 07:38 PM       View Profile for snowpants   Email snowpants   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit snowpants's Home Page   View IP for snowpants

'When the only thing that matters is gone
and there’s nothing here to keep you
When the love that gave you reason to live
takes wing and has left without you'

Whoa.  This really touched me!  You have an excellent write here, my friend.  Wow.  I'm suddenly at a loss for words, but this is so moving!  I can definitely sympathize with these feelings, too.  Absolutely loved it!  

sp


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...
Lone Wolf
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12 posted 11-14-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

BDC,

Oh, my sweet friend.  This one has me in tears.  I know this feeling so well.  Great expression and emotion you have captured in this one.  I hope all is well there.  Please take care.  **HUGS**  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats
Butterflies_dont_cry
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13 posted 11-14-2000 07:42 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

My heartfelt thanks to each and every one of you! And you are right...nothing to do but smile and move on    

Interloper* Your reply was beautiful...I'm honestly touched~

Sea* Thanks for the Hugs...I'll be great    

JM* Yeppers me sis..you know how those memories can be    

Ethome* It's always a pleasure to hear your thoughts on my writing...thank you so much~

Sunshine* It's always an honor to see you read~

RB* Your comments and words of encouragement mean the world to me...thank you~

James* Butterfly Dries

JW* Loved your thoughts     *cheers*    

Amy-girl* No tears sweets...all is as it should be~

Daniel* It's truly and honor to receive a poetic response from you...thank you very very much~

SP* Many thanks to you for your kind response..thank you for reading~

LW* I know you above all can understand these feelings...I'm doing fine my friend...no worries  hugs to you!!




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peppermint35
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14 posted 11-15-2000 03:14 AM       View Profile for peppermint35   Email peppermint35   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for peppermint35

Tears flow freely because you wrote this heartbreak so true.  Your talent and ability continues to amaze me, no one can do it as well as you

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley
BSC
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15 posted 11-15-2000 08:45 AM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Oh BDC ~ What heartfelt emotion is flowing through this sadly beautiful piece... Bonnie
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16 posted 11-15-2000 09:09 AM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Victoria

Nicely written as always..life is a struggle sometimes..but with that litle word HOPE we manage to get through it..enjoyed very much..

              ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

EagleOne
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Posts 2858
Between a laugh and a tear...


17 posted 11-15-2000 02:32 PM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

This is a timely post my friend, What to do? indeed that is the question. Well done as always, take care!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.
Gemini
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18 posted 11-15-2000 02:41 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

BDC-Breathtakingly beautiful and heartfelt.
Peace & Hugs.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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19 posted 11-15-2000 03:36 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry


Pepper* Your compliments are always so very kind..I truly wish I deserved them..thank you from the bottom of my heart~

Bonnie* Thank you so very much for your reply~

Victoria* Hope is something I hold onto everyday with both hands...thank you so much~

Eagle* Thank you...you know how much your comments always mean to me my friend~

Gemini* Thank you so much for reading~
passing shadows
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ESP
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since 01-25-2000
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Floating gently on a cloud....


21 posted 05-20-2005 04:27 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Your poetry is amazing. Every poem of yours I have read has sent echoes tearing through me, such beautiful writing!
Such painful feelings.
I feel too...

"Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake

 
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