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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
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0 posted 2000-11-13 10:17 PM


I just can't comprehend
your sometimes,
and when I'm out there
pitching stones gray
into piles, catching glances
weightless, from your frame,
I sing shy in my spaces,
swirling, with energies, lost
in air crippling with
every nearing minute,
with every crave
for understanding.
I can't comprehend
the interest absent,
or the way you walk,
so high, above the reasons
and the disassociation
penetrating, evident in the touches,
far and false. Oh, or the miles,
yeah, the miles, between two pieces
once one.
Or,...your SomeTimes.
Those little glimpses,
the smiles of why you ever did
running you over ~ flat
just like that,
a sometimes smile, ahh,
you remembered, if even only
for a sliver of time,
you remembered that you did
at one point and why,...
and That's the SomeTimes
that I can't comprehend.


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ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2000-11-13 10:42 PM


This reads like you're really frustrated with those sometimes...I know what you mean I think...if you're not going to do it wholeheartedly then why bother at all..it only takes a few extra minutes to do it right. I may be way off base here but why change from right to wrong and back to right again....dive in headfirst show some spirit and do it up right....I may be way off but I sure had fun trying...great poem really!!
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
2 posted 2000-11-13 11:27 PM


You sure know how to whip out some fast-paced, angry, confused, upset, not-knowing-what-the-hell-is-going-on poems lady - I really liked the added signifigance of the capitalized "T" in your SomeTimes!

Brava and huggggs!

C

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
3 posted 2000-11-13 11:44 PM


spitfire..great write!  i have a hard time with "sometimes" too...they just dont always make sense..!

hugs, dg


"so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
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4 posted 2000-11-14 12:56 PM


~Ethome, "dive in headfirst show some spirit and do it up right....",...Right On! Thank you very much.  .
~C, cool on liking the 'T',...as for the rest, now it's YOUR turn to tell ME if that's good or bad. Thank you ~O~  .
~DG, NOPE! They don't.   . Thanks for coming by you.
*Peace.

Masked Intruder
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5 posted 2000-11-14 02:41 AM


Vivacious indeed!  Loved the quickness with which I was forced to read through your words, and it wasnt' my fault for once. *grins*
SpitFire
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6 posted 2000-11-14 09:25 AM


~MI, never had my words called 'vivacious',...mmhm, liking that. Thank you for coming by. *Peace.
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