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Falling Hard For You
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Falling Hard For You |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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It wasn't just your soft eyes, it wasn't just your smile, it was somewhere deep inside you kept calling me to trial and then I got worried when I looked at you, you knew that I was falling, falling hard for you. I tried to leave the rush but I got thinking bout our time and I couldn't give you up when I tried to change my mind and there in the sunrise I looked at you and you knew that I was falling, falling hard for you. When we're not together I can hear our voices through an open door calling to each other for the love we're both yearning for. Now I'm done running cause I can't get by you know that I was just hiding inside love I would'nt show and all of these feelings that I tried to hide you knew that I was falling, falling hard for you..... |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Beautiful poem. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Don't you hate it when you just can't hide a thing anymore? This is a great poem. Loved it. Sandra |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'When we're not together I can hear our voices through an open door calling to each other for the love we're both yearning for.' Wow. Excellent write. This is absolutely beautiful, and so very romantic! Love it!! sp  I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Ethome- beautiful & touching, this is! lovely poem from that big heart of yours. truly loved this piece. take care. ~amy~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--you are on a poetic roll...so many wonderful poems, each so different...love the soft romance in this one!! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Ethome* This is so soft and tender...all the things that falling in love should be...a beautiful piece woven from your heart, very much enjoyed dear poet~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It wasn't just your soft eyes, it wasn't just your smile, it was somewhere deep inside you kept calling me to trial and then I got worried when I looked at you, you knew that I was falling, falling hard for you. I tried to leave the rush but I got thinking bout our time and I couldn't give you up when I tried to change my mind and there in the sunrise I looked at you and you knew that I was falling, falling hard for you. ====================== E-babes your rhyme is singing to me again I LOOOVE this one... you are at your BEST BY FAR when you are falling or writing about love... gets me everytime ...always has.  ( ya know the ONE too dont ya ) *smile* "and then I got worried when I looked at you, you knew that I was falling, falling, hard for you." ********** She couldnt look you in the eyes ... for fear her own would give her away She knew you'd see right thru her and know her heart had come in to play When at last your eyes met ... there was nothing that brown eyed girl could do there was no hiding ... that she was falling, falling for you jm ******** Brown Eyed Girl Words and music by Van Morrison Hey where did we go, Days when the rains came Down in the hollow, Playin' a new game, Laughing and a running hey, hey Skipping and a jumping In the misty morning fog with Our hearts a thumpin' and you My brown eyed girl, You my brown eyed girl. Whatever happened To Tuesday and so slow Going down the old mind With a transistor radio Standing in the sunlight laughing, Hiding behind a rainbow's wall, Slipping and sliding All along the water fall, with you My brown eyed girl, You my brown eyed girl. Do you remember when we used to sing, Sha la la la la la la la la la la te da So hard to find my way, Now that I'm all on my own. I saw you just the other day, My how you have grown, Cast my memory back there, Lord Sometime I'm overcome thinking 'bout Making love in the green grass Behind the stadium with you My brown eyed girl You my brown eyed girl Do you remember when we used to sing Sha la la la la la la la la la la te da. "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is beautiful, Ethome, and you've learned that the best part comes when we stop running! Corinne |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
One never falls lightly.......do we? Great write, as always. Jenn E |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh ethome...you make me long to be her... Don't close your eyes to the possibilities |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I have read this two times my PoetFriend Ethome, and I am impressed with this touching write... A keepers4me thank you for the read tonite  Coco |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Don't even try to hide it, ethome, can't be done when it's real...very well said. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Ethome, I think this might be my favorite poem of yours I have read so far . It is so completely true.. and I can definately relate. Very well done.~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
lovely ethome..a wonderful feeling ..falling hard..enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
I really like the repetition of the last lines in your first, second and fourth stanzas. It pulls it all together fabulously. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I want to thank all of you for your wonderful replies and I will get back to you all individually...thanks again ...ethome.... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, This is one of your best, you just get better you really do. Wonderful writing, love this one. And you're right you can't hide it not when it's real. Really great work, absolutely ace. Take care Mushy Marsha  < !signature-->Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning [This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 11-14-2000).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh my, this likes me very much....  Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
~Ethome~ *SIGH* this is so beautiful very romantic and sweet ~SEA |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Loved this much!!!!!!! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
What source this font? Bravo! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah! ethome, my friend... this is such a beautiful write... most amazing... great work!!! regards, sudhir |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
someone above said it - there's no point in hiding - no point in hiding it - and you've said it very heartfelt - and it shows - go for all the gusto ! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Sorry Et. this isnt a poem its a whitesnake Rock anthem, you missed your calling my friend. I love it!!! Regards Olias p.s Falling hard for you, just love that title. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Ethome-This was beautiful, very tender and heartfelt. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks poeminister for the comment on this much appreciated. Yes Sandra it is quite the feeling when you can't hide it ...somehow it seems you've gone beyond yourself.....thanks. Thanks Snowpants....glad you like those lines and enjoyed the read. Amy thank you so much for the romantic in your reply so good to hear from you. Martie I have been writing a lot lately especially since I've returned to Passions the poets here are such beautiful people that they inspire me to write....thanks so much. Thank you Butterflies for the soft and tender remark if any one knows about that you certainly do. Thank you Janet for you wonderful reply you're always such a positive shot in the heart...and yes I'm trying to get to you with these words everytime the same as get to me with yours...your VANtastic I'm your humble serVANt in poetry....take care Thanks so much Corinne for the wonderful thoughts I appreciate you taking the time to read...stop running is the key for sure!! Thanks Jenn...it seems when it's the real thing that yes you're right the fall is hard ouch! my heart!! Thanks for the comments. I will have to contact the rest after a while I have to go for a bit...ethome |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like to fall hard...but I always hope they do also...cause that breaks the fall...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Paula for you comment..with a heart as big as yours you won't find it hard for someone to fall for you. Thanks Coco for the read and the comments much appreciated. Thank you Balladeer for the comment and I know what you mean why fight it because it's just gonna happen!! Rosepetals thanks for making this one of you favs of mine I appreciate it....ethome Victoria thank you so much for dropping in for the read. Intruder thanks for the comment on the repititious lines at the ends of the stanzas. Much appreciated! Marsha thank you so much for that just getting better comment..I can only hope so .. you are such a sweetheart....take care ..ethome Sunshine I'm glad this likes you cause I likes you too...take care ethome Thank you Sea for beautiful, romantic and sweet comment....much appreciated! Sudhir so glad you could drop in for the read ...looking forward to hearing/writing from you again. Yeah you're right Wilfred ya just can't fight it so why try...thanks for the comments. Olias I don't know how I'd convince Whitesnake to go along with the idea but I sure appreciate the idea. Thanks! Gemini thank you for the very tender comment so glad to hear from you...ethome |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sorry James I missed you somehow thanks for the comments and yeah I love it if you can take them with you to break the fall.... ethome |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Interloper I'm very sorry I missed your comment about the fonts which I thought was a very clever one.....ethome |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is a very sincere write, ethome....I loved the title too....fantastic poem...peace! Nathan |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Nate for the sincere kind words...have a good one!! ethome |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I can hear this softly |
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