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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2000-11-13 12:34 PM


.... Just a flurry of ramblings that I managed to put together, and after a long stay away, I feel so happy to be back here.... so much that this is the third starting post from me for the day... and I am guilty as hell for flooding the forums... I appreciate your understanding and ever present support...

My regards,
Sudhir
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In the long vicissitude
of ungainly spread-out thoughts
I placed my bet on the first row
and set my mind on the
third element from the left.

Then Mr. Life played his deal
with a more than accurate throw
of the rolling dice and he said
"you win, but only by so much
that you have to bet once again."

That's when my senses left me
for the master of these
thought-puppets suddenly decided
'Hey, I feel lucky tonight!' and I bet
on the fifth element on the fifth line.

Then Mr. Life pointed his finger
upwards to the dark behind the
delighted incandescent light bulb
scoffed "Look, there's the dragon
hiding in the shadow out to get you".

His cough shot the dice into the
distant dark corner of the table
and I squinted my bespectacled eyes
and shrunk on my seat into a little nothing
and shrugged my shoulders before he spoke and left.

Yet he shouted rather daringly,
"Good game, but better luck next time"
I turned back and gave a glare, a stare like
a thousand volcanoes squirting lava
a million snakes spitting venom.

"Never again", I said, "no more betting"
"Right", he said, "see you tomorrow"
and that's when I decided it was enough
and ran outside, with the casino lights
dimming on me like black night.

Yes, I came out of that metaphor
of a life and passed a stage, but then
the instinctive gambler streak in me
sprung, I gambled on Mr. Life instead
and decided to write a rhapsody in love

And the music seems to be playing tonight
and the dice is rolling well,
the cards well laid up,
and bets spread out at even-even,
the only thing odd was 'me in love'. So strange!

Somehow I think Mr. Life is laughing
and enjoying his final laugh,
but then I don't care,
doesn't cost me a dime to be in love
but sure feels I've won a million-dollar lottery.

I feel rich though my bank says otherwise
but then, I don't care
I am in love, and I am betting on Mr. Life
I am all messed up in my head,
but I have got my priorities right.

I am in love, and I am betting on Mr. Life!
~

© Copyright 2000 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2000-11-13 01:19 PM


I love this!!! welcome home, sudhir, and you can post as much as you want to!

What a journey you've brought me on...I love the title, and I'm gonna quote it, too...fabulous.

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2000-11-13 01:34 PM


Hey Sudhir...Enjoyed this very much..yes love is a risk but who could pass it by without taking a chance...not I...James
Sunshine
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3 posted 2000-11-13 01:40 PM


So THAT is what you have been up to all along...and here it was, I thought you had work to do, instead, you're out gambling and carousing and finding love...

well done my friend...

now back to work!


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Jamie
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4 posted 2000-11-13 05:56 PM


Glad to see you back and posting again.


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


ethome
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5 posted 2000-11-13 06:11 PM


Sudhir these are excellent ramblings like I've come to expect from you and I love the story line here...wonderful fun..even when you're rambling...no matter what happens it seems that life is a gamble regardless of whether it's love or money...and now you're betting again ..but maybe on a sure thing... naw!! could'nt be......take care....ethome..
catalinamoon
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6 posted 2000-11-13 09:41 PM


What a great saga told here! Isn't love wonderful? Glad to see you again.
Sandra

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7 posted 2000-11-14 12:53 PM


Sudhir, my friend, your floods are composed of the waters of Life....please continue the inundation!! Great to see you!
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8 posted 2000-11-14 02:39 AM


"bespectacled eyes" is a wonderful phrase.  I also enjoyed quite a few other phrases in your poem, but I'm quite inept at figuring out where they went because the stupid browser won't let me look at it while I'm typing a response.  
Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 2000-11-14 03:25 AM


O Serene One... Thanks so very much ... I feel so happy that you would like to quote the title... Thanks again...

James, my friend, thanks a lot.... glad you enjoyed this one...

Karilea ... oops the cat's out of the bag... naw, I was (am still) ACTUALLY very busy... (Falling in love just made it that much more exciting)... Thank you so much...  

Jamie, Thanks... and I am glad to be back...

ethome, I am glad that you like my ramblings (about gambling)... Thanks...

Sandra, it is beautiful indeed... thanks...

O Sir Balladeer, O dear friend... Thanks so much... I feel so much more honoured...

Masked Intruder... Thanks for dropping by to read adn respond...

Regards to all,
Sudhir

Kethry
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10 posted 2000-11-14 06:39 AM


Sudhir, although you're in love will you still be my beloved one please. pleas!
Now I'm jealous ... of your amazing talent, although I always was.
write on
Kethry.


Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed?
Rex E. Alford

Sudhir Iyer
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11 posted 2000-11-14 01:03 PM


Of course O Kethry, but of course....

Thanks so much and many regards,
sudhir

Wilfred Yeats
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12 posted 2000-11-14 01:13 PM


At first I thought this a comment on the Ballot and the candidates - but I choose to see it as a rejectiion of life's termination and an embrace of love and life - and to that I give a hearty 'hear hear'!
Sudhir Iyer
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13 posted 2000-11-15 02:53 AM


Wilfred, O sir, thanks a lot for the "hear hear"...

regards,
sudhir

peppermint35
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14 posted 2000-11-15 03:07 AM


Oh my, if this is rambling, please continue to ramble on forever and a day   

I enjoyed reading so very much

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

Sudhir Iyer
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15 posted 2000-11-16 03:28 AM


pepper~
Thanks... I am so glad that you enjoyed this one...

Regards,
Sudhir

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