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Masked Intruder
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Near golden sunsets

0 posted 2000-11-13 01:18 AM



Last night I sat all day in the sun
dreaming with my eyes still open
peering at the stars as they
burned their radiant light
from millions
of light-years away to shine
down just for me
as I sat all day in the sun last night.

© Copyright 2000 Philip Zemler - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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1 posted 2000-11-13 01:22 AM


mmmmm lotsa things to think about in this one yuh sit and think with my eyes open lookin out for that thousand points o light
Poeminister
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2 posted 2000-11-13 01:28 AM


I like the perspective of this poem.  Nicely written.

Poeminister

Paula Finn
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3 posted 2000-11-13 01:55 AM


dreaming with my eyes still open...I love this line and the thought...lots here love this
Sunshine
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4 posted 2000-11-13 01:50 PM


MI, now that you think that way for me, I have to concur at your conclusion and find such peace in it...

this, I like...


Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
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vlraynes
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5 posted 2000-11-16 10:13 PM



MI-
  WOW...this is great!

   'Last night I sat all day in the sun
    dreaming with my eyes still open'
  
  i just love this concept...awesome.  
  wonderful write!  

  -vicky



  
  


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Ryan
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6 posted 2000-11-16 10:50 PM


My head still wants to explode.  But I'm not sure if it's the poem this time or the fact that I've been working on an evil, evil program for a good part of the last 4 - 5 hours.  Probably the latter (especially since I haven't even read the poem yet  *grins* ...one moment).   Well, I'd guess it's the program.  Yeah, definitely the program.

Ryan

Though I guess you could try hard enough to see stars in the daytime that it makes your head explode.  Hmmmm.


I like too many things and get all confused and hung-up running from one falling star to another till i drop. This is the night, what it does to you. I had nothing to offer anybody except my own confusion.
—Jack Kerouac


dgvarner
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7 posted 2000-11-16 11:19 PM


intruder..very interesting..   i like abstract..and this is a bit that...   i like to dream with my eyes open too--that way, i'm more apt to remember them...

this is a great little ditty  

hugs,dg


"so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey

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8 posted 2000-11-16 11:36 PM


really liked this, the symbolism used here, as the stars shine like the sun upon you at night.
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9 posted 2004-06-06 07:52 PM


pretty cool!
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