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OLIAS
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0 posted 2000-11-12 11:34 PM


Just for fun, or a rule of thumb ??

Haiku

Syllables five down,
Then seven to fit within,
Returning to five,

Olias


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ethome
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1 posted 2000-11-12 11:36 PM


very well done Olias very well indeed!
Sunnyone
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2 posted 2000-11-13 12:59 PM


OLIAS...
As far as I am concerned....this is the most perfect Haiku I've ever read!!  


Follow your dream!


Paula Finn
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missouri
3 posted 2000-11-13 01:58 AM


This is just great
OLIAS
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4 posted 2000-11-13 03:39 PM


Ethome I think this might be a little irreverant but its fun. Thanks for your response.

Sunny1 Looks like I perfectly stated the obvious lol, but I'm glad you approve, Thank you.

Paula Thanks for your response. I dont think its deserved though, It feels like all I said was 2+2=4 or is it 5,7,5 (lol) Thanks.


Regards to all

Olias

kaile
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5 posted 2000-11-23 03:41 AM


how about this?

Not a Profound Haiku

write five syllables~
other seven syllables~
a haiku is born!

thanx for the fun

Sunshine
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6 posted 2000-11-23 07:55 AM


By George, I think he's got it!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




OLIAS
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Pearl city Iowa
7 posted 2000-11-23 04:02 PM


Kaile,
Good one!! I like  

Sunshine
I have.... but I dont spread it around  

Thanks to you both for responding.
Regards,
Olias.< !signature-->

I got the sun on my shoulder, and my toes in the sand,
My womans left me for some other man,
But I dont care I'll just dream and stay tanned. S.Bish


[This message has been edited by OLIAS (edited 11-23-2000).]

wayoutwalt
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8 posted 2000-11-23 05:52 PM


big smiles

cool!

OLIAS
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9 posted 2000-11-23 09:17 PM


Thanks Wayout. glad you liked  

Regards,
Olias.

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