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snowpants
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0 posted 2000-11-12 05:03 PM


Won't you give me
Just a minute, love?
Please hear me
When I ask:
Won't you be mine?
Like the song belongs
To the bird,
And the snow
To the winter,
Won't you give
Your heart to me?
I'm telling you now,
I need you to listen:
I've been
A rainbow without color,
A flower without beauty.
Since the day
You walked away,
Life has been
The summer heat
Without the relief
Of Autumn;
The chill of winter
Without the hope
Of Spring.
My dear,
Life is only existence
Without you.


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

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Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
1 posted 2000-11-12 05:12 PM


kris-

wowza! this is so beautiful hon.
full of such longing and hope for
love. i think your new beginning is
on the horizon sweets. take care.

~amy~

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2000-11-12 05:15 PM


I love those lines
"a rainbow without color
a flower without beauty."

written like a true poet with a gift...good work!

snowpants
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3 posted 2000-11-12 08:36 PM


Amy:  thank you, my dear friend, for your kind reply.  I certainly hope you are right!    

ethome:  thank you for your wonderful compliment!  It is encouraging to hear those words!  

sp

I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
4 posted 2000-11-12 09:30 PM


Snowpants,
This is very well written and very moving. You try so hard.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

rosepetals25
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5 posted 2000-11-13 02:13 AM


snowpants,

    I have to agree with ethome.. I LOVEEEE those lines   Beautiful.



~~Tara aka rp25 :o)

peppermint35
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106
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6 posted 2000-11-13 03:11 AM


So powerful and so moving; like a sad and yet hopeful song... may it be and may it be soon

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

snowpants
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7 posted 2000-11-13 06:31 PM


Daniel:  thank you, my friend!  I'm glad you could stop by!  

rp25:  well, thank you!  I'm glad you enjoyed it!!  

pepper:  thank you, my friend!  You are sweet.  And, I hope so, too!  

sp

I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

catalinamoon
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8 posted 2000-11-13 09:10 PM


This is so beautiful and full of desire and longing. I hope you can find this happiness.
Sandra

snowpants
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9 posted 2000-11-14 07:34 PM


Thanks, Sandra, for your kind words!  

sp


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

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