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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Once, I saw you In full glory, it was a day in August, our first meeting at the edge of the Pacific, always called it MY ocean, having spent my years next to her dangerous allure, summer of ’76 I watched you dive from the "Clam" at La Jolla Cove, said you were lucky not to have broken your fool neck. My eyes did not miss droplets of seawater trickle, shimmering iridescence, a rainbow of scales, and I wondered as we lay idle in hot sand - sticking in little clusters at the ends of your hair, what it would be like to love you? I knew then you were more alive than I. (c) 2000 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 11-13-2000).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Don't think me obnoxious, but I identify with this SO much... wonderful! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Absolutely great second verse (the 1st is too) I love the ending very very good I enjoyed the read very much...ethome |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Sunshine and Ethome! Memories of being a teen at the beach! Corinne |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
i could identify with this - my teen memories are still fresh - very well done |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey Corinne, How are ya doing? I've been away fo a longish while... so nice to read you... Really enjoyed this one... regards, sudhir |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Wilfred! Sudhir, nice to see you back! Corinne |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great, Corinne! Denise |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
WHat alluring images here. Nothing like a gorgeous man, dripping wet, hm? And La Jolla Cove is the most spectacular place, though it is the area of my recent broken heart. Sandra |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Denise! Catalina, I grew up in Pacific Beach and La Jolla, have some wonderful memories of being a carefree beach girls. I'll have to dig up an old poem called "Three Beach Girls" for you. I'm sorry to hear that The Cove was the site of your recent broken heart. I always found the sea to be so very healing. But there are plenty of other places to go in San Diego to see the ocean! Corinne [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 11-14-2000).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, I just love the way you write. So write more often.  Park |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It would be a lucky merman to have a maid like you! |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
I really enjoyed the second verse, as well. Seemed to relay more to me, and I'm all about the relaying business. Good write! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Park. Is that like, "you never write, you never call?" Deer, you are such a dear! Thank you, Masked Intruder, your nick looks familiar from my MSN past! Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
No, its like I never see enough of your poetry these days... But if an email should come my way, it may make my day.  Park |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Once the ocean seeps into your blood... You're just sorta stuck with it, aren't ya?...  ... Nice job, Cor |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Park,you're still my sweet. Nan, Yes! It becomes part of you, a place where you escape (even if only in your mind) it feels like life. Corinne |
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