When Death asked for Mortality

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Open Poetry #10

When Death asked for Mortality

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

0 posted 2000-11-12 03:14 PM

When Death asked for Mortality

When Death asked for mortality
I offered mine outrightly
and in return I got from her
a gift of immortality

I took it with no hesitation
and the trade was quickly done
but after much passionate rejoicing
endless thoughts and misery begun

"...no single sound too rude
Upon thy slumber shall intrude,
Our thoughts, our souls- O God above!
In every deed shall mingle, love."
--Ed

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2000-11-12 03:18 PM

This is a wonderful thought provoking poem you have mastered the craft of saying a lot in a few lines...just simply great!!

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

2 posted 2000-11-12 07:10 PM

ethome--Thankyou for your comments. Glad you enjoyed the read.

inot2B
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since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

3 posted 2000-11-12 07:15 PM

I noticed that it was a SHE who made the deal with you. I'm sorry that we wicked women have a way that you men just can't resist. Enjoyed your poem

dragonpoe
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since 2000-11-12

Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida

4 posted 2000-11-12 07:17 PM

I couldn't help but catch that death was noted here as "she", makes it more interesting, thought provoking.
Great poem.

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

5 posted 2000-11-12 10:10 PM

inot2B--Thankyou for your reply. Death I made a female because well.. men don't reason before they do things more as much as women do, women always know things ahead of time. Most personifications of Death are always male but things are just often not what you expect them to be.

dragonpoe--I like your handle. Nice to meet. Thanks for your kind comments.

Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01

Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia

6 posted 2000-11-12 10:44 PM

Poetminister,
well done, a little thought provoking.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

compassion
Member

since 2000-11-01

Posts 135
USA

7 posted 2000-11-12 10:49 PM

..I can't do you justice with words, look at what you have written!! Sharing, lending and helping EACH other! What a poem, what a thought process, what a given!! enjoyed.

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