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A Perfect Rose
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A Perfect Rose |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
A Perfect Rose A site of perfection She’s happy and beautiful Life is going great It’s prosperous and wonderful When it shines it shines When it pours it pours She wasn’t prepared to beg To pick up change on all fours Her life spiraled down hill so fast She held on, to only some of her clothes Her young children slept in the car While she begged and froze She saw the looks on people’s faces She still had her dignity and would comb her hair She’d wear the clothes that she’d always wore People would walk, judge her by what she’d wear It didn’t take long to see the change That life’s turn had brought on to her Tired of the begging day and night Her life of prosperity was merely a blur For now she looked the homeless part Her clothes were soiled and hair untouched People would look at her again And give her looks of pure disgust They wouldn’t give to her Because she looked like a drunk Her inside still beautiful Only the exterior stunk For in her life it rained The way it rains on a rose outside But under her blackened petals She’s still a perfect rose inside |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Hi Purr Purr! Very sad when people are down others keep kicking. This is wonderful of you to show that we are all special no matter what we may look like on the outside. "For in her life it rained The way it rains on a rose outside But under her blackened petals She’s still a perfect rose inside" Very nicely said kat  |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
a heartfelt poem ..nicely written kat.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Such a nice reminder, don't put your nose so high when you see one so far down on their luck. Someday that might be you with your hand out. |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
An excellent ending to this. Brought tears to my eyes. To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
beautiful word pictures all the way through ....very nice work ...such a great story line ....really brings out the changes that one's life can go through....definitely inside is the best place to look.....thanks..ethome |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kat-- this is a beautiful reminder to us all. life can deal any of us misfortune and when we look up on others...we should think what if that was us? wonderful poem you have penned here. take care. ~amy~ |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Hi insect! Yes it is sad and someone I was talking to recently inspired me to write this. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks Victoria: Thanks! inot2B: Yes, I agree. Thanks for your reply. dreamkeeper: I'm glad it moved you. Thanks! ethome: I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks! Amy: That's exactly it! What if that was us? Glad you liked it. Thanks! kat |
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Dakota Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 125New York |
If only those around us Could see inside our hearts For when they look at us They'd see more than the outside parts If they looked inside our soul They may see we have the blues From what the world has stole And the kaos that ensues If they'd only open their hearts And see inside those blues They'd look past those outer parts And feel what it's like to be in our shoes Wonderfully written Kat ! as always... |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Dakota: What a beautiful poem as a reply. Thank-you so much! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! kat |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
[] I loved these lines: "But under her blackened petals She’s still a perfect rose inside" < !signature--> "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 11-13-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kat~ This is a tenderly written piece. We all need to be cognizant of the fact that 'There but for the grace of God ...' could go any one of us. And we don't need to just SAY it ... we need to DO it ! We need to reach out a hand to one in need. I think you would appreciate this one - /pip/Forum24/HTML/000987.html Thanks for the beauty of your tender heart. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Irish Rose: Thank-you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Marge: Yes, I agree. We DO need to DO it! I read your poem and it's absolutely beautiful as all your poems are. Thanks so much! kat |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Kat~ It's heartbreaking to see others suffer but heartwarming to see someone care, like I know you do. God bless you, Deb |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
"For in her life it rained The way it rains on a rose outside But under her blackened petals She’s still a perfect rose inside" <- powerful, beautiful words. I find it hard to understand homelessness, maybe because I've never experienced it. I think that sometimes it is the sadness of it that encourage people to hold judgement, disgust, and also fear. Here, you did a wonderful job of explaining it from their POV, creating a chance for the open-minding to view their world and maybe, hopefully understand. |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Deb: Yes it is heartbreaking and I do care alot. Thank-you! dragonpoe: I guess no one can really understand how the homeless feel unless they're homeless themselves. By writing this poem I tried to show how easy it is for any one of us to go from having everything to having nothing at all and how so many judge without thinking. I'm glad you found it powerful. Thank-you! kat |
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