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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2000-11-10 09:59 PM




Feeling that I’m alive
Although I see my wrinkles
Crisp are my eyes
Everlasting twinkles  

Living out my days
In servitude of God
Free my weathered skin
To a body shed of sod

© Copyright 2000 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
Butterflies_dont_cry
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1 posted 2000-11-10 11:14 PM


I was thinking crisp...like Crunch Bars...so
I read it again with a new train of
thought...oooooh yuh I like it much better
with the view from the new train...very cool
W.O.W. I like the way you weave!!

OLIAS
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2 posted 2000-11-10 11:33 PM


You speak reams in a very few lines, this is excellent work, I like it very much.

Regards
Olias

wayoutwalt
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3 posted 2000-11-10 11:36 PM


thanx BDC yuh and if you look again you might see something you missed

olias thank yuh fellow poet  

Butterflies_dont_cry
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4 posted 2000-11-10 11:38 PM


OOOOOOOOooooooooooooooo Yuh sneaky weaver
you!!! I will save my $$ for chocolate and
false teeth though   waaaaaaaaay cool you
are  

wayoutwalt
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5 posted 2000-11-11 10:03 AM


hehe BDC
wayoutwalt
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6 posted 2000-11-11 10:06 AM


hehe BDC
Rainydays
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7 posted 2000-11-11 03:06 PM


Very clever, Walt...enough inspiration in these few words to "lift" even the most unassailable reader, I believe.  Thank you ~

Rainydays  

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2000-11-11 03:39 PM


and fools go where angels fear to tread ...
very cool indeed Walt...
cool is good when one is feeling crisp ...
(and i usually am)
later-subliminal-metaphor-gator
jm

Michael
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9 posted 2000-11-11 06:07 PM


Hey you - congrats on your 2000th post ya know...  Twinkle forever I'm sure you will, Walt...  


Michael


wayoutwalt
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10 posted 2000-11-11 07:34 PM


rainy janet and michael thank you so much  
Ron K. Fox
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11 posted 2000-11-11 07:51 PM


Walt, congrats on 2000 and as always an intriguing read. Been a pleasure.

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox



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