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snowpants
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0 posted 2000-11-10 07:30 PM


As I watch you,
Lying asleep on the bed
Where you expressed
Your love to me,
It takes all I have
Just to keep myself
From reaching out
To touch your brow.

Do you know that
Love wasn't real to me
Until you walked into my life?
I never believed it could be
Anything more than a fantasy
Until you proved me wrong.
You swept my heart away
And showed it such devotion.

As you rest,
I can't help but notice
That look of peace
On your face.
What are you dreaming of?
Could it be the same reverie
That I have so often?

On those mornings
When you told me
My face glowed
With that same peace,
I could only think back
To the beautiful sleep
From which I had just arisen
And smile.

Never did I think
That Love would find me;
I was convinced that
I was destined to solitude.
Love found me
The moment I gave up my search;
It blew my heart away
Just when I rendered it useless.

Now I know
You are the one for me.
Every time I look into your eyes,
There is no doubt in my heart.
Sleep, my darling,
For that dream
Will open your eyes to love.


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

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Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
1 posted 2000-11-10 07:33 PM


kris--

this is definitely my favorite of yours.
your heart spoke volumes to me in this.
a beautiful declaration of your heart
that made me smile...you have a wonderful
gift but an even more wonderful heart as
I am finding out my friend. this is simply
stunning. and i stand in awe of YOU.

Take care.
~Amy~

Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
2 posted 2000-11-10 08:18 PM


Snowpants,
So well done, I loved your expression throughout. Keep them coming.

"Sleep, my darling,
For that dream
Will open your eyes to love"


Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

3 posted 2000-11-10 09:37 PM


This was such a touching show of love.  I enjoyed this, thank you for sharing it. *s*
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
4 posted 2000-11-10 09:41 PM


Such a tender weave of your heart SP..like
sharing a private moment with you.  Seems
like this is the way of true love...just
when you've given up it lands on your
doorstep so to speak...You're writing speaks
eloquently of the love you've
found...beautiful~

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
5 posted 2000-11-11 01:33 PM


Amy:  thank you so much, my friend, for your kind, kind words.  They are much appreciated as always.  

Daniel:  thanks!  I'm glad you liked!!  

Gentle Spirit:  thank YOU for reading.  I am more than honored to share my work with such wonderful people!  

Butterflies:  thank you for stopping by and giving such a thoughtful reply!  I am glad you enjoyed it!!  

sp

I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

Rainydays
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since 2000-10-21
Posts 324

6 posted 2000-11-11 02:41 PM


"Never did I think
That Love would find me;
I was convinced that
I was destined to solitude.
Love found me
The moment I gave up my search;
It blew my heart away
Just when I rendered it useless."

You've set your thoughts out so well in this engaging piece of writing. I was especially touched by this passage. Thank you ~

Rainydays


peppermint35
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106
Texas, USA
7 posted 2000-11-11 02:48 PM


This is so lovely...how wonderful that dreams come true and in such a positive way   This left a glow in my heart!!!

Pepper
"I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place"
Ram Dass


snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
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8 posted 2000-11-11 05:04 PM


Rainydays:  thank you for your kind reply!  I'm glad you liked it!!  

pepper:  thank you, my friend!  I'm glad you enjoyed!  

sp

I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24
Posts 925

9 posted 2000-11-11 07:39 PM


This is a beautiful expression of love. It reflects the happiness of a love you have discovered, I wish you to enjoy the treasures of the heart forever. best always. Ron

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox



snowpants
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KS
10 posted 2000-11-11 08:59 PM


Thanks, Ron!  I'm glad you like it!!

sp  


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

Poetboy96
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since 2000-11-05
Posts 12

11 posted 2000-11-11 09:04 PM


My response will be short but there will be enough in it.  Very excellently done my friend, very well indeed. www.johnspoetry.com
snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
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KS
12 posted 2000-11-12 01:45 PM


Thanks for stopping by John!  Glad you liked it!  

sp


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
13 posted 2000-11-12 02:00 PM


This is very soothing and hopeful...James
Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
14 posted 2000-11-12 02:04 PM


Goes to show you, just when you think all is lost you end up happier than you could have ever wished for.  What a tender look into your heart my friend.  Wonderfully penned and now my favorite of yours.  Wishing you the all of the moments you deserve in your new found joy.
snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
15 posted 2000-11-12 04:52 PM


James:  thanks!  glad you liked it!  

Mark:  well, thank you, my friend.  You are right.  It means a lot to me that you have chosen this as your new favorite.  It definitely is an honor.  I'm glad you could stop by!     

sp


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

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