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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2000-11-10 04:13 PM



If it seems like she's acting the part remember,
she's run the years on a treadmill of fate.
Oh, she's always known that she could do better
but it's the same old action and everyone takes.

Oh she'd be afaid if she did'nt remember
when she was'nt so sure surfing night waves.
Now her chest fills up with the songs of a summoner
singing sweet notes to the hearts she can sway.

In a lounge for the lonely she makes her escape
singing old blue-ribbon anthems of grace,
she calls lost lovers from graveyards of shame
and cleanses their soul with borrowed refrains.

She wears black leather boots with shiny brass buckles
with flashing green emeralds over denim and pearls,
with her long golden hair tossed and tussled
shining in lights of the nightlife world.

Take out the old shotglass let the memories begin
there'll be sippin and smokin to the Lord's missing wrath
but when the show opens all the scuttlebutt friends
will drown in the river of blues she brings back.

Now the crowd is seasoned with da capo survival
downing their liquor in candlelight shadows
so she gives them a chaser with a perfect revival
of oldies and goldies from the musical bible.

Oh she smiles at the invites the late night repasts
with her guests all braying their nightcap laugh.
but she'll turn them down like a bad broadcast
if their tune's not the same kind of blue she can match.

In a lounge for the lonely she makes her escape
singing her blue-ribbon anthems of grace.
Alone in her silence there's a love she once named
but he's lost in the memories of borrowed refrains.

© Copyright 2000 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

1 posted 2000-11-10 04:19 PM


BRAVO my friend
This poem 'me' really likes
If only I could find the rite words
To let ya know it's superb...

  Coco




[This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-10-2000).]

Marsha
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since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
2 posted 2000-11-10 04:22 PM


Ethome, this is soooooooo good, I really love this one, I can see her standing there singing. My this is such a great write from you, one of your best, I think. But you know I like all yours but I really do think this is one amazing poem.
Take care
               Mushy Marsha
                      


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2000-11-10 04:39 PM


thank you Coco for the uplifting reply...much appreciated!

thanks Marsha for your always so kind comments and for the reference to this being one of my best ...much appreciated

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
4 posted 2000-11-10 04:47 PM


Ethome--

excellent poem! this is my new favorite
of yours...the words just flowed out onto
the page as if telling a story. you had
me intrigued from beginning to end.

take care.
~amy~

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

5 posted 2000-11-10 04:50 PM


Now the crowd is seasoned with da capo survival
downing their liquor in candlelight shadows
so she gives them a chaser with a perfect revival
of oldies and goldies from the musical bible.

Oh she smiles at the invites the late night repasts
with her guests all braying their nightcap laugh.
but she'll turn them down like a bad broadcast
if their tune's not the same kind of blue she can match.

In a lounge for the lonely she makes her escape
singing her blue-ribbon anthems of grace.
Alone in her silence there's a love she once named
but he's lost in the memories of borrowed refrains.
===================
oh E-babes...this is so way cool...
and so melodic in its bittersweet tale...
you put us right there in the pub...
and I want the stool next to you.
OH yeah ---and those last two lines...
PERFECTION of poetry...
later- way cool lyric and verse gator
jm

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
6 posted 2000-11-10 06:23 PM


Ethome--What a colorful story you have written...and a poem of rhythm and graced perfection...You captured the atmesphere, the person, the feeling with reality colored with understanding...well done!
OLIAS
Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa
7 posted 2000-11-10 06:33 PM


Brilliantly atmospheric and well written, with a deep understanding and sympathy.
I loved it.

Regards
Olias

Daniel J D
Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
8 posted 2000-11-10 07:04 PM


Ethome,
Well done, I liked it very much.

"Alone in her silence there's a love she once    named but he's lost in the memories of  borrowed refrains".


Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
9 posted 2000-11-11 04:29 AM


Amy I thank you for those words of kindness and I appreciate you taking the time to read this poem.

My dear Janet....what can I say... you are indeed a great poet friend and I want to thank you so much and yes that stool is there for you to sit and listen to oldies and goldies and we can talk poetry or Van..thanks again ....ethome

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
10 posted 2000-11-11 04:35 AM


Ethome I like this...James
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
11 posted 2000-11-11 05:29 AM


I loved this read - thank you!  Roniece
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
12 posted 2000-11-11 06:17 AM


ethome,
can I tell you how smooth this is, probably not because there are no words to describe the more than satin quality of this write.
However I can tell you I love this especially
"In a lounge for the lonely she makes her escape"
Shades of Blue Hotel.
Be well
Kethry


Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed?
Rex E. Alford

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
13 posted 2000-11-12 03:25 PM


Thank you Martie I alwaya like to hear from you you are so kind

Thanks Olias for taking the time to read I really appreciate it....ethome

Daniel thanks for your comments much appreciated

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
14 posted 2000-11-12 05:45 PM


Sorry I missed you people I seem to have to keep reloading my page I don't know whether it's on my end or because Passions is quite crowded. I don't seem to have to do it anywhere else.....ethome


Thanks James for taking the time to read this poem ....ethome

Thanks Roniece for your comment I appreciate it so much.

Thank you Kethry for your wonderful words they are very uplifting I'll be visiting you
   ethome



Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
15 posted 2000-11-13 12:35 PM


Oh ethome...lady sings the blues...I hear her oh yeah I do hear her...close my eyes and see it all..great write

Don't close your eyes to the possibilities


ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
16 posted 2000-11-13 02:16 AM


Thanks Paula I'm so glad that you can hear her singing I appreciate your comments very much....ethome
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