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For Whom THe Bell Tolls
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For Whom THe Bell Tolls |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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For whom the bell tolls A foot a rod of measured ground Each are segments that we sail. Some silent, some hurricane bound But all are weighed upon a scale. A journey that a lifetime spills Though most were drab to me it seem Some warm, some hot and some had chills But one slipped passed the state of dream. I can't explain her charm and grace A penny serenade at berth My journey long and steps in place The serenade a pennies worth. But the change rattled these old bones She placed a rose upon my ear With subliminal over tones. That gripped my heart in happy fear. A cord that ends a knot with she And never in my wildest gleam Did I expect this ecstasy By thoughts that stepped from out a dream. I gave impossible a boost Built her castles within each nod And feathered out a dreamers roost And tried to stay this side of God. By that I meant I wanted both A very human wish at best. And took upon myself an oath That I would stay to stand the test. But time has played a game of rue And placed a notice overdue. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh wow....this grabbed my heart...all the way... and there is very little left to say... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sy, Truely amazing, I started to try and pick a favorite line and ended up highlighting the whole poem, this is just simpy true poetry Sy, I mean it. Thank you so much I loved it. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This one truly touched me So well written, this sad song Liz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But one slipped passed the state of dream. ================= A cord that ends a knot with she And never in my wildest gleam Did I expect this ecstasy By thoughts that stepped from out a dream. I gave impossible a boost Built her castles within each nod And feathered out a dreamers roost And tried to stay this side of God. By that I meant I wanted both A very human wish at best. And took upon myself an oath That I would stay to stand the test. But time has played a game of rue And placed a notice overdue. ===================== ya know what Sy baby.. the ONLY thing wrong with this poem was the fact that it ended ... I wanted it to go on forever... what an amazing piece of poetic grace this is... "A cord that ends a knot with she And never in my wildest gleam Did I expect this ecstasy By thoughts that stepped from out a dream. I gave impossible a boost Built her castles within each nod And feathered out a dreamers roost And tried to stay this side of God." my oh my ...this is classic Sy... and that is a very good thing. this one goes in my Sy file under HC for heartchimes ... cause it rang mine ... *winkiewinkie* late me grace of rhyme and heart gator me |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea, What you did say said it all. *L* Cerenity, A lovely compliment and I thank you. Elizabeth, I am happy to touch you no matter the way. Love Sy JM, I am addicted to your coated blarney Your sugar and pepper chilli-con-carne. I hold you on a pedisil The same the holds my zinfadel. Winkiewinkie slinkie. Sy |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I'm with JM - I didn't want this to end...extraordinarily beautiful - a treasure for my box |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
touching SY you do this so well |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Wilfred, Wonderful comment, thank you. Wayoutwalt, Glad it could touch you, thanks. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Seymour this is so well structured with such poetic beauty. Tremendous mood setting throughout...loved the way the thoughts and images cascaded down through each stanza.... excellent poetry.....take care ....ethome |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Thank you for the beautiful comment. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Well now I've read the book and it was excellent and this poem is excellent also...James |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Sy, I find the power of your words compelling. I have felt the dilema of "wanting both"... Excellent portrayal here.  Michael |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jmlie, Thank you so much for the read and nice comment. Michael, Excellent from you makes my day. Thanks Sy |
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