navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #10 » that he will come...
Open Poetry #10
Post A Reply Post New Topic that he will come... Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
dgvarner
Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

0 posted 2000-11-09 09:50 AM


she wishes
just this once
     (though she's wished
     the wish before...)
she could let her heart
be free
to love forevermore...

but what, she wonders,
is forever?
     (who made up that word
     anyway...)
and who will be the one
to hear the words aflutter
and not be afeared to stay...

a world resides
in her soul
     (a nether world--
     she welcomes all...)
but could he be the one
who steps in neon
and walks the walls...

she wishes
just this once
    (then she'll make the wish
     not again...)
that he will come
without thought to run
and love can then begin...

-dgvarner
10-24-00



[This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 11-09-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 dgvarner - All Rights Reserved
Marsha
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
1 posted 2000-11-09 10:00 AM


Dee, yes this is beautiful,

that he will come
without thought to run
and love can then begin

this is brilliant, a star a gem priceless and precious. Oh I love this one, clapping hands loudly in appreciation, bravo bravo bravo. Author, take your bow now, and don't slink off behind that curtain you. Come out and smile graciously. That's better  
I really love this one love, I really do.
Take care
                Bubbles    


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

SEA
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 Tours
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
2 posted 2000-11-09 10:07 AM


Dgvarner~ this is so heartfelt
'she wishes
just this once
(then she'll make the wish
not again...)
that he will come
without thought to run
and love can then begin...'

I remember what this feels like. Excellent write.   -SEA

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
3 posted 2000-11-09 10:11 AM


Oh,
It's always so hard to find a love that won't run away, but we just keep wishing.....excellent write, my friend!!  


Follow your dream!


Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods
4 posted 2000-11-09 11:20 AM


Every verse you write has such a singular style… REALLY like this one, dgvarner. Been there, been there, been there .

~ Beth

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
5 posted 2000-11-09 11:30 AM


The yearning in this is just so overwhelming...you write my heart with this one
Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

6 posted 2000-11-09 11:33 AM


I sensed the yearning in this also.  It's difficult to find someone who will stick with you no matter what, but boy, when you do...whoo hoo

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen



Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

7 posted 2000-11-09 12:03 PM


a world resides
in her soul
     (a nether world--
     she welcomes all...)
but could he be the one
who steps in neon
and walks the walls...

she wishes
just this once
    (then she'll make the wish
     not again...)
that he will come
without thought to run
and love can then begin...

================
dg, this is so very well expressed ...
your longing and anticpation is felt...
and the style and format you chose to write this in makes the yearning even more defined.
reads like a wish...whispered in to the wind.
(you can pick the direction)  
very well done...
very well related to as well...
take care
jm

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
8 posted 2000-11-09 02:05 PM


Just get him there my friend and I don't think he will be thinking of running then.   He would have to be nuts to even consider it.  Lovely verse from you and so glad to see you back in here.  You ready for the cup of "Joe" yet?  Hugs to ya!!!(hope he don't mind!!)
CocoBaci
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

9 posted 2000-11-09 02:18 PM


Dg, enjoyed reading the poem and I like the style of your write

Coco

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
10 posted 2000-11-09 04:01 PM



dg-
   you already KNOW how much i love
   this one, and i'm so glad you
   finally posted it.  


      'a world resides
       in her soul
          (a nether world--
          she welcomes all...)
       but could he be the one
       who steps in neon
       and walks the walls...

       she wishes
       just this once
          (then she'll make the wish
           not again...)
       that he will come
       without thought to run
       and love can then begin...'


   this is just such a clear window
   into your heart and soul.  

   keep believing, my friend...the
   best is yet to come...
   never stop wishing...

   love and hugs,
   -vicky



"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Charisma
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Ascendant
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906
lost in blue pages
11 posted 2000-11-09 04:19 PM


wonderful penned.....as always.

((hugs))
Charisma

Parker
Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
ON
12 posted 2000-11-09 05:07 PM


hmmmmmm, wishes, wishes, wishes....  

Falling for a neon cowboy could be a danger to your heart, your very brave my sweet poet.

A penny into the wishing well for this sweet verse then.  


Parker

kcsgrandma
Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
13 posted 2000-11-09 11:16 PM


but what, she wonders,
is forever?
(who made up that word
anyway...)
and who will be the one
to hear the words aflutter
and not be afeared to stay...

***************************

Love this, dg.  Nothing wrong with believing in forever, but don't forget to live in today.  

hugs

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

dgvarner
Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
14 posted 2000-11-10 12:15 PM


BUBBLY ONE..this is me bowing..smiling graciously..trying to slink off behind that curtain now...    thank you my friend..   ye of gracious applause....  

SEA..thank you friend poet  

SUNNY1..yes..still on the lookout    

BETH..why thank you    and i'm glad you liked ..

PAULA..glad to have written a fellow poet's heart..i guess we all have the same feelings at one time or another...    

IRISH..waitin on that 'woohoo'  

JM..yes..a wish whispered in the wind..  

thanks COWBOY MARK..    you dont think he'll run huh..well..maybe one day we'll find out..    hey, its good to be seen back in here    and, yes, on that cup of 'JOE'! and the hug was a good little bonus too..  

COCO..thank you poet friend  

TRICKS..yes..that clear window thing is the scary part!  lol..but then, never was i one to keep good my own secrets...i'm hoping, that the best it yet to come--i'm feeling rather deserving of it by now..lol  

CHARISMA..my thanks to you friend  

PARKER..one day..my neon cowboy will come...    thanks for the penny love--did you throw one..or two..?  

MAR..the living in today is often the hard part..we dreamers--we tend to live in yesterdays and tomorrows...    but i'm trying..  

thanks all, for your replies..much appreciate them!  

hugs,dg




"i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..."

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #10 » that he will come...

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary