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Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2000-11-08 07:30 PM


    Do I tell you how my
    heart feels, how happiness
    and passion are inside
    me, then would you
    believe my faithful
    yearning?

    Do I tell you how
    each street looks so
    bare until I stand
    face to face at your
    door, meet you
    eye to eye, greet
    your smile with mine

    Would you then brush
    the hair from my face
    softly with your hands,
    kiss away the tear
    from my cheek

    Don't you know
    my lips have memorized
    your kiss, my fingers
    have traced your naked body,
    a thousand times,
    my heart beats in
    tune to your soul

    Haven't I told you
    your voice makes me
    sigh, your words
    tremble my skin,
    your eyes make
    me weak waiting
    for your touch,
    your passion is my
    desire,

    You have a way with
    me like no other
    writing your name
    gently across my smile
    don't you know?


"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown


© Copyright 2000 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
Ron K. Fox
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1 posted 2000-11-08 07:43 PM


A very beautiful poem to someone who brings such delights to your heart, I hope it continues, and he continues also.

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox



Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-11-08 07:49 PM




    Don't you know
    my lips have memorized
    your kiss, my fingers
    have traced your naked body,
    a thousand times,
    my heart beats in
    tune to your soul

    Haven't I told you
    your voice makes me
    sigh, your words
    tremble my skin,
    your eyes make
    me weak waiting
    for your touch,
    your passion is my
    desire,

    You have a way with
    me like no other
    writing your name
    gently across my smile
    don't you know?

====================
oooh this is so softly sensual and beautiful in its longing ...
written so gently ...like a delicate touch
wonderful write, wonderful read  
take care
jm



There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
3 posted 2000-11-08 08:04 PM


greeneyes this is a wonderful way to state your love for someone. Great write
Rich

Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
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Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
4 posted 2000-11-08 08:52 PM


Greeneyes,
Well done, a very passionate poem for someone you really care for.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

5 posted 2000-11-08 08:56 PM


This is so truly beautiful dear Lady.  What a lucky man he is!!  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free.



Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
6 posted 2000-11-08 09:01 PM


Greeneyes--

this is beautiful! soft and almost like
a private moment that i've witnessed.
thanks so much for sharing this with us.
wonderful write!!

take care.
~amy~  

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
7 posted 2000-11-08 09:15 PM


GreenEyes* This is so tender and sensual...a
beautiful weave of desire and love~

catalinamoon
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8 posted 2000-11-08 09:32 PM


Well, if you show him this, he will surely know! Simply awesome love poem.
Sandra

LoriJaye
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since 2000-10-23
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9 posted 2000-11-08 09:55 PM


Ohhhh, GreenEyes...this is soooo lovely...*sighhhhhh*

I especially liked the closing stanza:

You have a way with
    me like no other
    writing your name
    gently across my smile
    don't you know?

"Writing your name gently across my smile" just sings to me somehow...beautiful.

"A smile is when your inner beauty comes outside."

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
10 posted 2000-11-08 10:02 PM


"my heart beats in
tune to your soul"

"writing your name
gently across my smile"

What a beautiful way to show someone how much they mean to you GreenEyes ... this is just lovely!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Gemini
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Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA
11 posted 2000-11-08 10:12 PM


greeneyes-I found myself re-reading your words, penned very beautifully.
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
12 posted 2000-11-08 10:17 PM


Very romantic and sensual all in one poem package....I really enjoyed the read... wonderful expressions.......ethome
poetic_imperfection
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Posts 45

13 posted 2000-11-08 10:19 PM


I have to say that there is a lot of love here.  Nicely wrote.
PW

Jenn E
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada
14 posted 2000-11-08 11:20 PM


Very sensual...so well expressed......written with a gentle heart.....
Warm Smiles
Jenn E

Greeneyes
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15 posted 2000-11-09 09:23 AM


Ron K. Fox~  well, I can wish....but the delight of thought is there...thanks for your kind reply....*S*

Janet Marie~such a longing, it's really a wonderful thing....thank you for enjoying, and telling me....

spiked~thank you for your reply.....I so appreciate it....

Daniel J D~passion a wonderful feeling....thank you for stopping by....*S*


Gentle Spirit~I too am lucky....*S* good to see you posting here....thank you for such a warm response...

Aimster~I do enjoy sharing, especially in words....I appreciate yours, thank you....


Butterflies_dont_cry~that means much to me....thank you

catalinamoon~ahh if I could show him I would...maybe one day the nerve will hit me....until then....*S* thanks catalinamoon...

LoriJaye~one of my favorite feelings...thank you for telling me you enjoyed...*S*



"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown


Greeneyes
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16 posted 2000-11-09 10:39 AM


Kit McCallum~you too picked some of my favorite lines, thank you for telling me...I appreciate you reading....

Gemini~a great compliment, thanks so much...*S*



"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown


Greeneyes
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17 posted 2000-11-09 11:28 AM


ethome~thanks so much for letting me know you enjoyed...
it's much appreciated.....


poetic_imperfection~thanks for expressing the one thing
I was going for....*S*  


Jenn~your reply made me smile, thank you....


it is responses such as these that make writing and expressing worth while.....

Greeneyes~


"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown


Charisma
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18 posted 2000-11-09 12:45 PM


what a wonderful way to express your feelings of love....really enjoyed reading this wonderful penned piece.


Charisma

Greeneyes
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19 posted 2000-11-12 01:43 AM


Charisma~ your comments are much appreciated, thank you for letting me know you enjoyed...

Greeneyes

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown


Larry C
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20 posted 2002-05-02 07:14 PM


Lauren,
How could anybody not know? Breath taking...

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