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Rainydays
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0 posted 2000-11-07 09:54 PM



"Morning's Promise"


Awak'ning, shaken from a dream
by night's intrusive thief
with dews of morning's pleasures past
still beaded on the leaf

She'll rise, reluctant, from the veil
of dawn's last silken sigh
with echoes stirring round her head
of luna's lullaby

What treasures will befall her eyes
as darkness lifts its wing
as daylight settles valley wide
and birds in cypress, sing

Reminding her that long ago
God's gracious promise made
as swift, her feet across the floor
she lifts the linen shade

Rainydays


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Ron K. Fox
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1 posted 2000-11-07 10:00 PM


rainy, this is the most beautiful poem I think I've evr read from you...I'm going to put in the library. it's so beautiful.

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox



Ron K. Fox
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2 posted 2000-11-07 10:05 PM


back again...I messed up putting it in the library...now I have it..thanks again
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-11-07 10:05 PM


She'll rise, reluctant, from the veil
of dawn's last silken sigh
with echoes stirring round her head
of luna's lullaby

=======================

Reminding her that long ago
God's gracious promise made
as swift, her feet across the floor
she lifts the linen shade
==================
exquisite, exceptional writing
this is indeed beautiful and graceful
the cadence and flow completed the gift.
take care
jm


There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
4 posted 2000-11-07 10:11 PM


"...this is indeed beautiful and graceful       the cadence and flow completed the gift."

Thanks JM, for saying it in a way I wish I could...

Beautiful rainy days.

jwesley

Victoria
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5 posted 2000-11-07 10:22 PM


this was just gorgeous RainyDays..loved it..

                      ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Rainydays
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since 2000-10-21
Posts 324

6 posted 2000-11-07 11:13 PM


Ron, so putting this in your library means you like it?   Thank you, what a compliment! I'm glad you found it suitable for saving.

Janet Marie, I thank you for your kindness. Glad to know you enjoyed this one.

jwesley, thank you. Finally something that's not so sad, you know? Thanks for reading and letting me know.

Victoria, oh thank you so much for your sweet response!

Rainydays

Balladeer
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7 posted 2000-11-07 11:33 PM


rainydays, there is nothing I enjoy seeing more than excellent poetry done in perfect style. Every line, every syllable perfectly counted and every accent on the mark...this is wonderful....
Butterflies_dont_cry
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Posts 3733
Michigan
8 posted 2000-11-07 11:36 PM


So beautifully woven RD...this was indeed an awesome piece~
Rainydays
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since 2000-10-21
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9 posted 2000-11-08 07:49 AM


Balladeer, my most humble thanks to you this morning, kind sir.

Butterflies Don't Cry, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I enjoyed writing it! Thank you for your nice comment.

Rainydays

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
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In the winds of Cherokee song
10 posted 2000-11-08 02:48 PM


Linen protection
lifted in daylight's promise
exposing new hope

~~*~~

Quiet whisperings
heartfelt response to friendship
found in home of soul

====================

Thought I would try some senyrus today instead of my normal verse.  Hope you like them.  This is truely a beautiful piece from
you and I now have a new favorite.....well, maybe tied for first.  Can you guess which is my other favorite of yours?

BloomingRose
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since 2000-08-09
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11 posted 2000-11-08 03:08 PM


Lovely poem, and very well written.
Deb  

Rainydays
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12 posted 2000-11-08 03:53 PM


Mark, senryu becomes you, my friend. Yes, I do like them, and very much ~ thank you for such sweetly spoken whispers. I am thinking...about which poem you're referring to, but I think I know. I'm glad you like this one...I rather enjoyed writing it.  

Blooming Rose, thank you for taking time to read, so glad you enjoyed it, and I thank you for your very kind response!

Rainydays

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
13 posted 2000-11-08 04:19 PM


I like this....it is enjoyable to read...it is smooth as silk....James
Elizabeth
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14 posted 2000-11-08 07:25 PM


Truly beautiful, Rainydays...the flow was perfect, and I love the whole idea of this....great work.

Elizabeth


You cling to your ways and leave mine to me.
Suum cuique.
~Elizabeth



Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
15 posted 2000-11-08 08:50 PM


Rainydays,
A superb write, well done. I just keep enjoying reading your poems.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

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