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He Had Not Dreamed
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He Had Not Dreamed |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief 
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Across the horizon lies a new baby day. With the memories not yet faded in its eyes it waits the growing dawn. In the valley stands a ragged man he remembers the wonders of yesterday and still regrets the mysteries of today. Yesterday, he thinks, he was younger and the world, according to him, was better. Now the day begins to take shape and the man knows that it draws near. It is not as pretty today, in his eyes, as it was yesterday, or maybe the day before. So mechanical in its design the world adds and deletes. A deranged calculator it divides our lives, and subtracts at will. Ah… the birth of new day has come and the sun shines bright over empty lives and forgotten homes. Shells, the sperm of last nights intense bombing, have buried themselves in the streets impregnating the land with fire that blazes all too evident in the day’s shining light. The ragged man knows he had not dreamed. Burnt out homes glistened in the sunlight. Smoke still danced across the sky. Faintly in the distance the man could hear cries for help, he knew now that he was not alone. It had been no Dream. [This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 11-07-2000).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Effigy~ this is just well, I'm at a loss for words, but wanted you to know I read and it just left me speachless.....  -SEA |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Sea- well I guess that might be a good thing. Sorry though, I didn't mean to take your voice away. I hope it comes back soon. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
That's the saddest part of all...that the things that would only fill the nightmares of our grandparents are our reality...this was penned with strenth and the power of emotions...you have a great talent to weave...and give a reason to pause and ponder...thank you much for sharing this! |
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azure Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 52 |
Wow, this one really took my breath away. What powerful imagery, combined with such strong emotion. Loved it. Azure "I put it down on paper and then the ghost does not ache so much" - Sandra Cisneros |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Thank you. I'm glad that you both enjoyed it. |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
"So mechanical in its design the world adds and deletes. A deranged calculator it divides our lives, and subtracts at will." ~~ I especially like these lines Your poem is strong in image, message and tone. Good writing. Rainydays |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very impressive poem! Sandra |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
Nice. A very apocolyptic vision, but a good piece. I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry. |
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