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spiked
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since 2000-01-13
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Hammond, La USA

0 posted 2000-11-07 09:44 AM


A smile of light the moon does shine
As I hear it whispering tonight
With shadows in my path I see
This starry night I spend with thee

In this blur a vision seen
A light that shines in front of me
It guides me where I wish to go
To taste this life I want to know

Can this be dream of paradise?
Refracted from the shards of light
Bent to see the way I feel
I sit and wait, should I reveal?

I’ll leave you wonder, as do I
Was this a dream I had last night?
Or is it something I conceal
And keep it for my own appeal

To share with that whom I see fit
And draw them on this phantom trip
Experience these in which I dream
These hidden treasures rein supreme.


[This message has been edited by spiked (edited 11-07-2000).]

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Victoria
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since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869

1 posted 2000-11-07 10:04 AM


Beautifully written Spiked..I enjoyed very much..

              ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
2 posted 2000-11-07 10:15 AM


Can this be dream of paradise?
Refracted from the shards of light
Bent to see the way I feel
I sit and wait, should I reveal?

I think you have a wonderful style of writing

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

3 posted 2000-11-07 11:09 AM


Dreams or no, I'm just glad to know there's light and smiles in your life again. Thanks for all of your help, Rich. (still won't defrag tho...story of my life, ain't it?)
CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

4 posted 2000-11-07 12:34 PM


"WAS THIS A DREAM I HAD LAST NITE OR IS IT SOMETHING I CONCEAL, I SIT AND WAIT SHOULD I REVEAL"...

Spiked this poem is great!

Coco

spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
5 posted 2000-11-07 12:40 PM


Thanks victoria, wynter,serenety and coco.
Rich

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
6 posted 2000-11-07 02:15 PM


Congrats on 500 Rich...a beautiful piece to
mark your milestone...I'm sure there will be
many more to come and we'll be there to
watch you hit them  

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
7 posted 2000-11-07 11:33 PM


Rich...such a softly sensual poem...sweet dreams...To share with that whom I see fit
And draw them on this phantom trip
Experience these in which I dream
These hidden treasures rein supreme.
Thanks for sharing with me.

Rainydays
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since 2000-10-21
Posts 324

8 posted 2000-11-07 11:40 PM


Spiked, hi. This is beautifully written with just the perfect bit of mystery. Really very nice, thank you ~

Rainydays

spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
9 posted 2000-11-08 01:10 PM


Thanks Paula, Butterflies and Rainy it is very nice to have poetry I write received so well.
Rich

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