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Drawn to the Flame
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Drawn to the Flame |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 I know the pain will engulf me That the pleasure will be lost Only ashes will be left to see I’ll be the one to pay the cost But your heat draws me in Pulling stronger than any force There’s no way to stop once I begin Through my heart and soul you course I breathe you in and taste your love Weakened by your silent strength In your eyes I see the angels above For one touch I’d go to any length For you to love me I’d sell my soul To dance under the stars just one night I know the diversion is your only goal But your flickering gleam has blinded my sight Tell me I’m your one desire Spin me a web of lies to hold Just allow me to walk through your fire I’d rather die burning than remain cold Take me...need me...use me Your wish is my burning desire Heal me...consume me...destroy me Each move you make takes me higher I’ll never hurt enough to let go I will keep playing this loosing game Because my darling...don’t you know I am but a moth and you are my flame |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
enjoyed your poem, wonderfully written and expressed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and ya know I feel the singe of this one. sighs and hugs, holly girl. But I think we're gonna be just fine. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDon'tCry~ Or do they ? This is absolutely beautiful, sweetie. You've outdone yourself with heartfelt thoughts. Lovely, lovely, lovely. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Holly- wow...this just aches... i felt EVERY word as i read this. it really touched me. I have to agree with Marge...you have truly outdone yourself with this... there just aren't enough words to tell you how much i love this... such heartfelt emotions here. beautifully expressed.  hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Butterflies, I have read this poem over and over again, and each time I find it so beautiful. What a great expression of love. All will be fine. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
This is great all the way around...... Great expression, rhytmn, rhyme, and a metaphoric ring to it all. Not to mention I know this flame well..... Wonderful post BDC... It goes straight to the heart. ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Butterflies what raw emotions you have spilled in this one....WOW!!! Very well written and expressed ~HUGS~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
BDC It's sad when something so beautiful can hurt right to the core. Hugs to you, Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Like that last part Butterflies "Because my darling..don't you know I am but a moth and you are my flame." That is such an interesting metaphor as the moth is always drawn toward a bright light. The rest is just a wonderful classic of the helplessness of an undying love....this poem really states the depth of a loving connection ...the kind we can't explain but keep trying to.....great! job! ethome |
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Highlander Member
since 2000-11-06
Posts 50Dundee, Scotland |
in your eyes I see the angels above" Yes, I know the feeling. You write with exquisite fuel. [This message has been edited by Highlander (edited 11-07-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Only ashes will be left to see I’ll be the one to pay the cost But your heat draws me in Pulling stronger than any force There’s no way to stop once I begin Through my heart and soul you course I breathe you in and taste your love ===================== For one touch I’d go to any length For you to love me I’d sell my soul To dance under the stars just one night I know the diversion is your only goal But your flickering gleam has blinded my sight ==================== Take me...need me...use me Your wish is my burning desire Heal me...consume me...destroy me Each move you make takes me higher I’ll never hurt enough to let go I will keep playing this loosing game Because my darling...don’t you know I am but a moth and you are my flame ==================== now what does a Butterfly know about being a moth??   YAYAYAYAYAYYAYA... I'd have been here sooner but ... um ....well ... there was a full moon and ummm ... you know how at night the flame shows up better and ummm ... Walgreens had a sale on singe-proof mascara and moth balls and ummm ... *sigh* ... yeah yeah ... YOU KNOW. SO ya think ya know me pretty good dont ya YOU must actually READ my poetry LOL me thinks I need this one tattooed next to me butterfly Well me girlie girl ... ya wrote a poem and an anthem--ya know.... and you already know I feel every line in this ... and that it is an AWESOME poem..right? I thank ya for this one baby ... and just as soon as me wings stop smoking... I'll give ya a big hug for it Its like I told me twin ... we gotta keep each other out of those bug zappers ... but then they do have such a lovely blue glow.................... yayayaya.......... love ya for this one too ... love ya butterfly babes me(aka Moth Queen) LOL |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This one is destined for my favourites folder. Excellent work my friend, a perfect expression!"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
~BDC~ This had my heart wrapped up and walking through the flames of some of my favorite memories deep inside, the torch will always burn This is wonderful, I love your poetry and this is among my favorites and now in my library -SEA |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh BDC ~ Heartfelt emotion just flowing through this beautiful piece. Simply lovely. Bonnie |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I love the analogy here...wonderful write |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
BUTTERFLY, this is sooooooooooo good actually great and I'm threading this heart tugger in2 my library.You soar in this write Butterfly... Coco |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I don't even know how to begin to thank all of you for your kind comments and heart felt replies. You are each so special to me in so many different ways...thank you for allowing me to pour my heart and soul onto these pages and know that you will reach out to accept them with kind hearts. My heart felt thanks to each and every one of you. **Angel Wing Hugs and Butterfly Kisses** |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Holly-- *applause* this is awesome! i dare say it is probably my favorite one of yours to date... i felt every emotion in thisas you poured out your heart and soul. now course all of your poems are fab but something about this one really got to me! you and jan definitely are SS!! take care. love ya, amy |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
It seems as though that there will always be at least one love in each of our lives that will forever be burning no matter how much time passes. You have penned an anthem(as JM said) that will forever be cherished by many. Your heart and your soul are true golden treasures of heaven and I will forever hold true to the pieces of it that I have been able to enjoy. I could go on forever as you know, but will not, as some things are just known as fact. Fly high my friend of pastel wings. Whether it be on the wings of a butterfly, an angel, or a moth. |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Wonderful. Simply brillant. I love this. [This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 11-07-2000).] |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
this now my favorite by you...so much emotion, yearning...the burn of desires shall never go out.Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Amy* I'm so glad you enjoyed it...this was written for many emotions...and many "Moths"...hugs to you my friend~ Mark* I'm not sure I can agree with the golden part but it's an honor for you to think so. Thank you from the bottom of my heart~ Effigy* Thank you so much for your kind comment and for reading~ Ron* The certainly don't...no matter how much reality we throw on them Thank you so much~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Because it needs to find more flames in the birth of this night. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
BDC...this is a very fine stretch of your pen...and of your wings... so very tender, so very from the heart... it is lovely... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
BRAVO ..... ========================== Take me...need me...use me Your wish is my burning desire Heal me...consume me...destroy me ============================== compleat surrender ... (no, not mispelled) Love is. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i almost missed this lovely poem.. *I’ll never hurt enough to let go* i think when you truly love someone..that is so true..enjoyed..BDC ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Butterflies ... what an amazing write! Wow ... you had me drawn in from the beginning, and such an ending stanza! Love and desire course through your lines with incredible power ... excellent writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* Thanks Sunshine* It's an honor to hear from you...thank you very much~ Interloper* Thank you very much~ Victoria* It is truly all or nothing isn't it~ Kit* My most sincere thanks to you from the bottom of my heart. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful.....beautiful....and soooo....ful desire...love it, and a thread to my library. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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