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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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Rolling Away ~*Marge Tindal*~ I reached for your memory last night and it rolled away from me In giant steps I chased after it looking down corridors of familiarity only to find that in it's hasty retreat it had left no footprints There were times I tried to chase it away and it would not go Now ... now when I feel the need to revisit the love we shared I can't find a trace of you anywhere I looked for the tears that I cried and left puddled on the pillow It seems that I can no longer find them to wallow in I turn to leave and run smack into a remembering wall of you Suddenly I am crying them again and it hurts as much as when you left the first time *For those who need to know you are not alone in your feelings* ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Yes Marge, this is perfect.......so many have felt this way, and felt all alone...it helps to know there are so many of us here who can relate.....  -SEA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"a wall of remembering you" exactly how it is. Yer a lovely, lady, Marge. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
OH Marge...this just happened to me last night...SMACK right into that wall... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Marge- oh yes...i know this wall well. 'I turn to leave and run smack into a remembering wall of you' i love this...sad, but beautiful. love ya, my friend, -vicky < !signature--> "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 11-06-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ Yes ... by caring and trying to understand what others go through ... we can help. *Hugs* Serenity~ Yeah ... I know how you feel, sweetie. *Hugs* Paula~ And now here we are with a hug of understanding. *Hugs* Vicky~ I'm sorry any of us have to know it. But here we are to share it with one another. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
you do have a way with words... 'tis indeed a classic line... "I turn to leave and run smack into a remembering wall of you" excellent poem. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
clearly one of the most visual, emotionally charged pieces you have placed here at passions... it is truly a gift to see this genre of poety and images from you.... free verse blends with you, marge, and the imagery you've chosen is very well done. thank you for this read |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Marge* Not sure who needed this one tonight but I'm sure you will find that it touches many more than just who it was intended for...but you knew that didn't you...Seems the harder we push those memories the steeper the hill gets and the harder we look for them the darker the night gets...*sigh* ((hugs)) |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Marge, You get better and better. You are the best. "Now ... now when I feel the need to revisit the love we shared I can't find a trace of you anywhere" Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ Thank you - It matters to me what you think. I appreciate your thoughts on this piece. *Hugs* Doreen~ Why, I thank you, gal. Just one of those fell to the page pieces. *Hugs* ButterfliesDC~ Yeah ... guess I did. It just felt needed. *Hugs* JD~ I appreciate that you think so. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--this is wonderfully done...I'm with Doreen...but times when I want to remember...where is the wall then? Hugs! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Marge beautiful write alot heart in this Marge girl...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
And that will likely be all of us at some point...part of life's experience hey Marge(y)? I like your choice of words and images here...they spoke to me. Thanks for that hon. Hugs K The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like this one a lot Marge..."I reached for the memory of you" you've got the mood set here sort of in the twilight zone...very interesting and exciting the way you have presented it....always a pleasure to read you work Marge roll'em in here and I'll read'em take care ..........ethome |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
marge woo i liked this poem i did a different touch it had and i love you r talent to show it |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've got the tears going here Marge ... I'm just gonna pretend you wrote this for me, cause it's hitting home ... love ya, Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I know - it seems we don't find the wall - the wall finds us. *Hugs* Tracie~ Thanks, hon. *Hugs* Kamla~ Good to see you, little blue butterfly. *Hugs* ETHome~ Thank you always for your encouragement. *Hugs* Walt~ Big *Hugs* Kit~ No need to pretend - It's yours sweet lady. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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compassion Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 135USA |
Marge, Sentimental journeys! So sorry yours was sad. (Written so well, but that's allways). you cry, we cry, don't cry. (between two pennies) "I looked for the tears that I cried and left puddled on the pillow It seems that I can no longer find them to wallow in" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Those darn walls just seem to pop up at the most inappropriate times, do they not? Lovely heart you have my friend. So do you want to climb a few trees with a cowboy instead of scaling walls today?  |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Marge - Oh I am really impressed - a new format- and demonstrated empathy in a whole new area - I must tell you - I too have hit that wall - but then there times like Martie- I went searching and found none - ~sigh~ Wonderful write ! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh Marge, you got me with tears in eyes again you PoetLady you... Well, what else can I say but a well written poem by my lady friend who knows when and what to say... Hugs2U Coco PS: If ya know one thing about me... a tear in eye does me some good... my compliments Marge for touching my heart! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Compassion~ I love sentimental journeys, even if they contain a tear or two. Thanks for the read. *Hugs* MarkB~ Hi, sweetie. You're on, Cowboy ! I can shinny up a tree with the best of 'em. And you rate right up there ! Love you. *Hugs* (and another one) Wilfred~ Thank you for liking it. I guess we all need to touch the wall with those memories from time to time. *Hugs* Dani~ Sharing your tears and sending a *Hug* ! Yes, I think a tear of remembering does us all good. I'm never afraid of my tears when they fall for someone I love, have loved or will love. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very touching, Marge. Well done! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Denise~ Thanks, hon. Pleased to know you found it touching. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Marge, the words were perfect, as there probably isn't one of us who hasn't experienced this! Love it. (((hug))) "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kathleen~ Thanks, hon. Yes ... most have been there ... and we can share *Hugs* with all. Thanks for yours. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Marge~ love this, but I hope I never have to visit that pillow again! I think we all have puddled a pillow at least once in our lifetime. Thanks for sharing this one. Deb |
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