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azure Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 52 |
Where I live now, there is no sky. There are no trees. There is only a dim calm, the second hanging before catastrophe, thin air at a great height. Where I live now there is the silence of forgetting. Where I live now, there is but a fog of memory, a brokedown dream of my life before. Where you live now, there is flesh and heartache, moonlight melody, conquerings. Where you live now there is the shattered blackness of midnight. Where you live now, there is fire in the shining eyes of angels. You wait there alone, unfolding, remembering, searching out my eyes. Soon, soon I will return to the ruins. I am rising slowly, a phoenix from the ash. I am coming out of my skin. I will break the surface. I will seek you out, whispering "hurry, I am home." We'll collapse together, soft, naked, losing our bodies, vanishing forever and leaving no broken hearts. Azure "I put it down on paper and then the ghost does not ache so much" - Sandra Cisneros |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful poem!! wonderful ending great reflections of the pain of separation and the emptiness of being alone.....this is very good...I thoroughly enjoyed it....welcome to Passions....take care ....ethome |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
you weave a beautiful haunting desire. loved the ending. Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i hope this tale works as well as you have showed it to me yuh |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
I really like this, dear  One of my favorite aspects of the way you write is how you bring together great pain and extreme feeling with such a sense of emotional blankness, sort of two complete opposites that co-exist in each others presence like it was meant to be. The other is the way you combine solitude and aloneness with a sense of comfort and soothing that comes with it, irony at its best  Wonderful write  Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Azure~ I was holding my breath! WOW! Sensual and very vivid images.....loved this! -SEA |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Azure, This is beautifully done. Lots of passion. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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azure Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 52 |
Thanks, everyone, for your kind words & support! ThUnDeRkYsS - thanks sweetie, I'm really glad you enjoyed it...when am I going to see more of YOUR writing? Azure "I put it down on paper and then the ghost does not ache so much" - Sandra Cisneros |
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