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When We Make Love.....a sonnet

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Balladeer
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When we make love, the gates will open wide
To treasures I had never come to know
And I will live with happiness inside
Delighting in the richness of your glow.

When we make love, all pain will disappear
Erased by all the joy you make me feel.
Our day of blissful joy is drawing near
To taste the nectar our love will reveal.

When we make love, our hearts and souls will blend
As essences  now mingled into one.
Toward Heaven's path my spirit will ascend
To harvest golden apples of the sun.

Should fate decree we'll not taste passion's thrill
Rest easy knowing I will love you still.


© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 11-06-2000 06:52 PM       View Profile for Highlander   Email Highlander   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Highlander

Ah, you do a sonnet proud. This is lovely.
Someone is a very lucky woman.



[This message has been edited by Highlander (edited 11-06-2000).]
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2 posted 11-06-2000 06:53 PM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Victoria

tender and beautifully written balladeer..i love sonnets..and you write them so well..

              ~Victoria~


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- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

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When we make love, our hearts and souls will blend
As essences  now mingled into one.
Toward Heaven's path my spirit will ascend
To harvest golden apples of the sun.

Should fate decree we'll not taste passion's thrill
Rest easy knowing I will love you still.

=================
OH MY ...
you dont play fair....
just how much is a girl supposed to take ..
you know what a sonnet does to me...
and then you write it so sweetly kissed with passion ...
talk about swoon to the moon ...
this is superb poetry ... BEAUTIFUL
only one thing left to say...
(wanna say it with me) ...  

OH HOW I LOVE WHEN YOU WRITE LIKE THIS!!!!
*kisskiss*
later-hung-the-moon-gator
jm
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WooHoooooo..... What more could any girl ask for???.. Nice one, Deer...
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5 posted 11-06-2000 07:11 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

This is the sweetest promise in a sonnet I've read in some time--and I especially loved the last couplet.

More of these, and we shall have to start calling you Sonneteer...hugs to you, m'friend.
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6 posted 11-06-2000 07:11 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Balladeer~ I'm on the next flight to Florida...... Whew! This is SO romantic.....gonna have all us gals here SWOONING..........enjoyed this very much!   -SEA
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Oh, deer...be still my heart!  This is gorgeous!
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Balladeer~
Stick your head out the window and I KNOW
you can hear me *sighhhhhhh* !

Sweet, sweet man of my heart ...
This is a lovely sonnet that leaves me breathlessly wanting more.

'To harvest golden apples of the sun.'
M m m m m m m m m !
I'd better stop before they send me to my room !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~



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Balladeer~
A very lovely sonnet indeed.
Someone is very special   well penned
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


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10 posted 11-06-2000 07:56 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

And once again we see why this one's called the Balladeer... and gets his own button and everything...

Nice job MM....
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thankymisterdeeryuhcandoeverythingyuhknowyuhyuh
Kit McCallum
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"Should fate decree we'll not taste passion's thrill
Rest easy knowing I will love you still."

Be still my heart ... Oh Michael, this is just so lovely. What a beautiful flow ... such tender and romantic sentiments you've so perfectly penned. Sighing, and departing quietly ...  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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highlander....I thank you and welcome you to Passions  

Victoria...thank you...yes, a sonnet is definitely the preferred choice for love poetry,

JanetMArie...you have just convinced me to write a LOT of sonnets!! Thank you, sweet person  

Nan....beats me! Thanks, teacher...

serenity...glad you like it...I was gonna write a villanelle but I don't want to be called a villaneer!!  

SEA...the palm trees are swaying in anticipation. Somehow I don't think your hubby will approve but the thought was nice  

Martie...any gorgeous from you is worth its weight in gold. Thank you!!!

Marge...I thought that was Hurricane Andrew coming back around!!!  Thank you for trying me on for sighs  

Tracie....YOU are....for such a lovely reply.
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14 posted 11-06-2000 08:07 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

This was a beautiful piece, Balladeer, just beautiful.

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II


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Rebel...thank you for the words and please come on back when you can. You're home here  

Walt...No, I can't write like you cause there;s only one Walt....I thank ya, sir.  

Kit...so you're the kind that sighs and departs? NUTS! Thank you, my friend  

wynter...I thank you for the beautifuls  

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It's very beautiful. Any woman would be proud!
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Beautiful love poem filled with devotion and the rest easy of time well spent together. The intimacy goes beyond the act. Like the song says

"After the lovin
I'm still in love with you."
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Balladeer~ I know, if I was serious he'd have a fit!!   But still, very romantic.. -SEA
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But then I sneak quietly back in for an encore presentation ...  
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you wrote one heck of a sonnet ole bud -
knowing the last couplet is supposed to resolve what's 'built' in the 1st 12 lines -I was on tinterhooks wondering how you'd pull it off - and you did it beautifully!
my hat's off
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Balladeer-
   oh yes...***sigh***...this
   is absolutely lovely.  
   the whole thing is just
   so beautifully written, and
   then...the perfect ending.  
   wonderful...and soooo romantic.  

   -vicky




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heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes


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Wow 'Deer this would make any girl breathless!!  Very nice!!!!!  

Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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Beautifully done sonnet! Is there nothing you can't do well? Excellent!

Denise
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Ah 'Deer...what you do...what you do...

Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
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