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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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I’m wandering again Alone in the park Reverie streaming Like the Brandywine creek beside me Sometimes it’s hours Sometimes days Between those moments I can hear Or read Or feel Or grasp Like a straw As the undertow Seeks to pull me under That fragile wisp of Rye Or is it a Daisy, A Black-eyed Susan Whatever It’s tied to you To that door He’s closed The clock she’s stopped So I’m lost In crowds of lovers Hand in hand Walking, sitting, Swinging Laughing in the sunshine Shading me From rays of you Your eyes Your love I try running Climbing This gym of bars Or swinging higher And the clouds intervene As if to say “Not now.” So I retreat To the house To the room To the screen To the hope That is my life My lifeline My pipe to you A younger me A free me Would be loose Untied unable to see The reality Of you Would prefer a shallow substance To the sweet depth of your heart To the tendrils you’ve woven Around my feet Around my soul Around me And I’m back In electronic nirvana Succumbing to my addiction Seeking my fix Waiting for you Things which matter most must never be at the mercy of things which matter least. ~ Johann Wolfgang Von Goethe ~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
WY~ I just ate this up!! I love it....you are amazing  -SEA |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Your poem just made me cry bill..very touching.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this is your very best...into the library it must go to be read and reread..in hopes that someone will someday feel that way about me, Bill {{hugsssss}} ~Wynter< !signature--> "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 11-06-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~You know Mr. Yeats,...you just scooped me up and took me along in this one. Captivating work,...got lost in this and it's ability to swallow you whole. Very much enjoyed. Thanks. *Peace. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wilfred, you are great and this poem proves it. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent sir. . . Take me to that electronic nervana. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Fix, indeed.....sometimes I think that makes us dopes.  As usual, sir, excellent poetry.... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--You are the weaver...for you have woven your heart into this poem. "To the sweet depth of your heart To the tendrils you’ve woven Around my feet Around my soul Around me" Beautiful!!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Beautiful writing here, thanks, I fell right into this scenario. Sandra |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
oh...to wander distant paths...as long as they take you back to her... shes one lucky lady and I'm sure she knows it Don't close your eyes to the possibilities |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
good poem here yuh mister wilfred |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Where there's a will, there's a Mr. Yeats... well done, Sir! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sir Poet Bill* Another gem woven from your pen of gold. I enjoyed it very much~ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Wilfred, your writing here is exquisite and once again Poet Friend, I enjoyed the read  Coco |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
SEA- It's all slight of hand- and well 'eating' - I won't go there ~G~ Thanks Victoria- Touching is what it's all about - I'm sorry I made you cry Wynter- In the library - an exceptional compliment - thank you Spitfire- Thank you - but avoid those code words - I'm vulnerable to them ~G~ Kethry- A 'great' from a great poet is a high compliment to me - thank you. Sven- I've found it's not always nirvana - but I sure am addicted - Thank you 'deer- The 'dope' I see in the mirror - I know is a hopeless case - C'est la vie - Thank you Martie- From the master of weaving - I am called a weaver too - is most flattering - thank you so much (bowing humbly) Sandra- I hope you found a soft spot to fall on ~S~ Thank you Paula- I hope she knows too ~S~ Thank you Walt- You're so kewl - thanks for reading Karilea- I try - but it may be in probate a long time ~G~ Thank you Butterflies- Maybe I should try jewelry? ~G~ Thank you so much for your shining compliments Coco- I really appreciate your words Thank you |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
great lines in here, Bill. i particularly liked : "As the undertow Seeks to pull me under" "So I’m lost In crowds of lovers" "Would prefer a shallow substance To the sweet depth of your heart To the tendrils you’ve woven Around my feet" you did a really fine job with this... it flows, it pulls the reader into your heart, your mind, and it has a dreamy, lost-but-found feel love it! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Wilfred-Very touching, sweet and sad, nicely done. Cheers and hugs to you, my friend. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Doreen- Gemini Thank you both for you kind and thoughtful replies - I DO appreciate them To everyone who reads this - I'm not feeling too well at moment - I hope to be feeling better soon - so my posts and replys will be few and far betweem for a bit. I do love all of you! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I love the direction in which this one flows. It is written with a style I often like to try myself. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Temptress- When I write 'Free (or unstructured) Verse' I don't really think about it - some verse(s) get laid down and I look - and whatever the pattern - if I like it I try to retain through the rest as I complete my thoughts Thank you |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I agree with Kethry. You are a great poet. This one flowed more smoothly than the Brandywine, and took me with it. A truly superb piece of writing Liz |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Wonderful penned.....as always a beauty, I love it. Charisma |
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